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Humanity
Contributed by
ZAK1957
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Sunday, 23rd March 2008 @ 03:15:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
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As we go through life week by week
There is one thing that we all seek
Though for far too many life is bleak
If only all could see and hear God speak
A better life - peace and harmony
No wars , no hunger , no one in need
A loving family united .........Humanity
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2008-03-23 03:15:44]
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Re: Humanity
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by 5MinutePoet on
Sunday, 23rd March 2008 @ 04:44:17 AM AEST
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I always give what i see as a fair critique.
Personally i didn't get on with this at all, i thought it was too short to inspire, to forced to impact and too laboured to redefine.
I think that if you were to really address such an issue as humanity then you would really have to step up a notch and come form a completely different action.
Also i completely disagreed with the inclusion of God. Apart from the obvious conclusion that being infallable he has no such place within humantiy, a process entirely sculpted from trial and error. Also the concept of religion has started entirely too many wars and brought out the worst elements of "humanity"
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Re: Humanity
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by ammar on
Sunday, 23rd March 2008 @ 06:13:17 AM AEST
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Hello
Thought this was a nice and simple piece.
I agree with what you write.
Regards,
Ammar |
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