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One Dead Tree Around
Contributed by
Hyacinth
on
Friday, 14th March 2008 @ 11:28:11 AM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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One Dead Tree Around
See how clouds turn their shapes.
A soft shadow interjects into the sky.
In the dry land I traipse.
Fully censored beauty of God,
That used to be a pile of clay,
Now, she sits on the crag edge.
From her lips, a final whisper.
Nature dies, the sky splits.
Her screams sinfully innovates the duty of Death.
The infant presaged the deal,
I was able to hear him clear.
Trying to reach out, but no…
Not in time.
My shadow grows bigger,
It touched the challenge,
It took the chance.
The eyes shed no tear,
Condemnation of a miracle.
And there is only one dead tree around here.
Copyright ©
Hyacinth
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2008-03-14 11:28:11]
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Re: One Dead Tree Around
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by emystar on
Friday, 14th March 2008 @ 12:52:12 PM AEST
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Very thought provoking write.
Huggs,
emy |
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Re: One Dead Tree Around
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by Hyacinth on
Friday, 14th March 2008 @ 09:53:02 PM AEST
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Thanks emy for your tolerance in my english ;p
i'm off to post some comments to other poems too.
*i saw the notice on homepage yesterday night at 3 am after a long day at work,but i was too tired to even check mine,lol.* |
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Re: One Dead Tree Around
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by Honey56 on
Saturday, 15th March 2008 @ 12:28:01 AM AEST
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| Like this write..Excellent |
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Re: One Dead Tree Around
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 15th March 2008 @ 01:36:16 AM AEST
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Firstly, welcome to YPDC!!
What an amazing look at change. Damn! This is spectacular poetry!
So many wondrous lines I could copy and paste, but I'm just awestruck at
the magnificence you've rendered with your pen throughout the entire
piece!
Beauty imagined and captured on the page. Utterly outstanding!
Will be looking forward to more from you! =)
~Breezy
(who will be reading this again and again)
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Re: One Dead Tree Around
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by Hyacinth on
Sunday, 16th March 2008 @ 02:37:56 AM AEST
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Wow! Thanks guys.
I hope you like it for real and not just trying being nice to me.
There is a difficulty to the ones where english is not their native language.
*on the other hand Samuel Beckett once changed from english to france and took the risk*
*and no...i'm not a 'Beckett'...i know.. :( * |
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