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At The Corner of The Box
Contributed by
CARAAAAA
on
Monday, 10th March 2008 @ 05:55:09 PM in AEST
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Trails of therapeautic smoke
form chains, disentagled
and escaping the stifling confines of my breath.
The shrouded air is lilting, undulating,
with a husky voice and melancholy melody.
He sings of rusty situations
and sodden little corners.
I follow suit, but in a while
my voice quavers and breaks,
a singular salty tear drop
snuffing out embers on an ashtray.
This song, like a pack of dusty cigarettes
I simply cannot quit.
It replays incessantly and
Oh darling, how I really hate to be so morbidly intrigued.
Copyright ©
CARAAAAA
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2008-03-10 17:55:09]
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Re: At The Corner of The Box
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by SilverRain on
Monday, 10th March 2008 @ 09:57:15 PM AEST
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| an intriguing post! Beautiful use of words. Had to read it a few times as their is so much in this that speak volumes! Stunning. Well done. |
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Re: At The Corner of The Box
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Thursday, 13th March 2008 @ 10:39:08 AM AEST
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Hard to pick out a line when each has been sculpted so cleverly.
However, "he sings of rusty situations" is pretty hard to beat.
You packed a lot of imagery in here
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Re: At The Corner of The Box
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 28th June 2012 @ 11:52:03 AM AEST
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| Vivid images created here, in a smokey laid-back style. Enjoyed the writing and the read. |
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