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Foundation
Contributed by
shelby
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Friday, 7th March 2008 @ 10:32:12 AM in AEST
Topic:
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There was no firm foundation
it just took now to realize
the value of family
was lost and contrite.
Four walls void of love
for the sake of how it should be
Life of pretense
and false intent, blinded to see.
Years of dysfunction
have taken there toll
and gardens void of function
death to heart and soul
Fantasy land of how it should be
the blinders come off
the heart begins to bleed.
The foundations crumble
fall swift to the ground
wounds raw and wide open
truth tossed round and round.
The tears flow unending
softly hitting the ground.
The grasp of the past
becomes a heavy thorn crown.
The night beckons on
reaching for light
darkness holds tight
increasing the strife.
Truth of the foundation
bitter mixed with sweet
tis the art of forgiveness
that still eludes me.
Copyright ©
shelby
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Re: Foundation
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Friday, 7th March 2008 @ 10:42:05 AM AEST
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I think my favourite lines here have to be
"The grasp of the past
becomes a heavy thorn crown"
Moving and eloquent.Nice work
Steve
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Re: Foundation
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by fielding88 on
Friday, 7th March 2008 @ 10:44:31 AM AEST
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| well this was excellent, I loved the final stanza the most I think. It help the greatest truth for me, it was where I connected the most with your poem, and overall I think the poem was very well written, great job with this one. |
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Re: Foundation
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by PhantomVampyress on
Friday, 7th March 2008 @ 03:29:23 PM AEST
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wow!! this is simply amazing and full of wisdom and i think in alot of ways in some points of everyones lives we all can relate.
in one way or another some of us all have had disfuntion in our lives or family.. awesome job here
rock on,
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: Foundation
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by Bleedthelove on
Saturday, 8th March 2008 @ 07:50:52 AM AEST
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| I really like this. You wrote the hell out of this. Excellent job. |
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Re: Foundation
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by NoSaint on
Saturday, 8th March 2008 @ 10:20:06 AM AEST
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although forgiveness is the hardest thing to do it is the best thing for you mind, body and soul
hugs
Shari |
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Re: Foundation
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by unknown_utopia on
Saturday, 8th March 2008 @ 01:20:44 PM AEST
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| Another thought provoking flow. |
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