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Weeping Willow
Contributed by
jyssvw
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Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 02:20:05 AM in AEST
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Faded is the sketch
You drew of my face
You’re name signed at the bottom
With all your love, you said
Aged are the spices
That once thrilled to no ends
The butterflies and numbness
When I first saw myself in your eyes
Ancient is the love
I once tossed in your path
Tripped up on my own words
Only to get thrown down again
Antiquated jitters
Upon belated arrivals
A transition of lives
We waged our fair battles
Endless nights
Of passionate love making
We came together
To be pulled apart
Gone is the glamorous scent
Of your hair on my pillow
Did you get this last letter I sent?
It was my last, a portrait of my past
My weeping willow
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Copyright ©
jyssvw
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2008-03-06 02:20:05]
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Re: Weeping Willow
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by LoveStruck_Hippie on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 03:34:56 AM AEST
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A very heartfelt piece. Thank you for sharing.
Peace
~Shannon |
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Re: Weeping Willow
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by constantlyme on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 03:54:49 AM AEST
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beautifully written, really really like it.
- Danielle |
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Re: Weeping Willow
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by irodethetrain2u on
Thursday, 6th March 2008 @ 03:17:45 PM AEST
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| Not much to say, but "Beautiful" |
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Re: Weeping Willow
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 7th March 2008 @ 07:25:25 AM AEST
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| Love the poem and the first lines of each stanza are so descriptive. Great job! |
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Re: Weeping Willow
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by Whisper on
Saturday, 8th March 2008 @ 06:16:04 PM AEST
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Mine was a lighthouse. How, I enjoyed this write . Thank you
Whisper
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Re: Weeping Willow
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th March 2008 @ 09:41:47 AM AEST
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My dear jyss ..
..this is painfully absolute. There is an agony within these words that I've rarely
seen from you- a vulnerability, if you will. Damn beautiful nevertheless.
There is a sadness, but also a beauty in the experience of passion, thrills and always
the brilliant anxiety of first meetings, first touches and first kisses ...
I love this one. Truly. It's completely wonderful, right down to that
magnificent way the poet's object was addressed in the end. Damn fine poetry.
~Breezy |
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