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I tried
Contributed by
amundson048
on
Friday, 22nd February 2008 @ 03:46:25 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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I did all I could to make it work
My feelings for you, Still they lurk
In so many ways I tried to change
Why it wasn't enough, Seems so strange
I tell myself to ignore the way I feel
I just wish the feelings weren't so real
Some times I feel the thoughts could kill me
The pain goes away when my mind is busy
I hate how they say, time heals all
When all time does, is put my stomach in a ball
The worst part is, your the one i want too see
When time away, is what I need to see more clearly
The burden you bare
Just isn't fair
All over some *****
Who didn't care....
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Re: I tried
(User Rating: 1 ) by 5MinutePoet on
Friday, 22nd February 2008 @ 04:03:57 PM AEST (User
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, i always like to start off with a positive. And here it has to be the i of the word 'lurk'. Very enjoyable.
However there were some points, usually at the end of each stanza where it all seemed a bit forced and labourious. It also tailed off toward the end slightly.
But still love that lurking |
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