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Words cannot hurt me
Contributed by
littlepoet
on
Friday, 22nd February 2008 @ 02:21:53 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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You can beat me up,
You can knock me out.
You can whip me with a belt,
Without a doubt.
You can hurt my legs,
You can break my arms.
But whatever you say to me,
Can't bring my feelings any harm.
On my body,
is where you can out the pain.
But no matter what you say,
I will feel no shame.
No matter what you say about me,
You can't set my anger free.
Because wat im saying is true,
Im saying words cannot hurt me.
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littlepoet
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2008-02-22 14:21:53] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Words cannot hurt me
(User Rating: 1 ) by 5MinutePoet on
Friday, 22nd February 2008 @ 03:07:25 PM AEST (User
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Well hey there little poet.
I like this, it starts off really upbeat for a poem with a sadistic streak.
I think it would flow alot nicer if you shortened the end of the 2nd stanza and fleshed out the begining of the 3rd.... but that's just technicality. The main thing is that you said what you wanted to say, and you did it to an anonymous public, but a public none the less
I think it would flow alot nicer if you |
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