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I'm going now
Contributed by
M
on
Monday, 10th March 2003 @ 04:40:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I sit here; trying not to look at my tear stained face,
It taunts me, reminds me of how useless i am,
I'm trying to find the right words to say
How sorry i am, and this was never my plan.
I know now that down this line i've finally come to the end,
I've tried to sort myself out along the way, but to no avail,
I've no hope or will left,
I can't find either of them; they've left no trail.
i feel i've got to give up now,
There's no energy left inside me,
I'll never know or understand why
My pain you refused to see.
My body is a temple to too many cuts,
My mind holds the key to too many hidden memories,
My heart has bared too much pain,
My soul, too many scratched in stories.
Don't cry for me,
I don't deserve your beautiful tears,
I've become more and more ugly
Over these past few twisted years.
Don't waste your time on me,
I don't deserve your care,
I've tried to push you back,
But to leave me alone is something you wouldn't dare.
I've found time on my own now though,
There's no one here to stop me,
Don't pretend this is not happening,
Wake up, this is reality.
i'm going now,
I'm leaving this cold, terror filled place,
I'm not like you, destined for great things,
i don't have your beautiful grace.
i'm going now,
This moment in my life i've never feared,
For you it may be different, but when you need me,
Lift up your eyes
And look towards the sky,
Because suddenly a new star has appeared.
Copyright ©
M
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2003-03-10 16:40:00]
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Re: I'm going now
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by Damien on
Monday, 10th March 2003 @ 06:03:32 PM AEST
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| That was a very good write-Damien |
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Re: I'm going now
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by blueheart on
Monday, 10th March 2003 @ 09:29:17 PM AEST
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| You've described sadness, misery and anguish very well. |
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Re: I'm going now
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by bobotheclown on
Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 12:08:59 AM AEST
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Emily this was so sad I really enjoyed this. I hope its not true however.
My body is a temple to too many cuts,
My mind holds the key to too many hidden memories,
My heart has bared too much pain,
My soul, too many scratched in stories.
Don't cry for me,
I don't deserve your beautiful tears,
I've become more and more ugly
Over these past few twisted years.
I loved all of your poem, but those 2 stanzas really stood out. Hang in there Emily you have described your emotions beautifully. I hope you have learned to cope as beautifully as u describe your pain. Keep on writing.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: I'm going now
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by Sandra on
Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 01:44:50 AM AEST
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| You speak of sadness and heart-ache with a twist of release. I love this write!!! Keep up the good work. |
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Re: I'm going now
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by wyrd_faerie on
Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 01:02:03 PM AEST
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| oh honey...don't let go...i need you em...we can do this, yeah? trust in me... |
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Re: I'm going now
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by nightrider on
Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 05:37:52 PM AEST
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this was an amazing poem, but the stanza that stood out to me was this one:
i feel i've got to give up now,
There's no energy left inside me,
I'll never know or understand why
My pain you refused to see.
i dunno, but it feels like you wrote what was running through my head today... this poem really blew me away... |
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Re: I'm going now
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by ap on
Wednesday, 12th March 2003 @ 03:39:48 AM AEST
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hi m,
ive been here... where u stand.. yet im very much alive/// n well... ure a brave girl... it takes such fortitude to face reality... to understand how imperfect n cruel life is... to try to embrace the deepest of our fears... of death...
yet it is such cowardice i'nit sweet girl... it takes so much from u to cope with all the cruelty and irony and tragedy... all life... its so easy to give up... yet... is it not very tough too, to abandon all u hav? to think about all the good things ull leave behind u? all the tears that wud be shed wen u leave...?
it takes great courage to take another step wen the whole journey seems vain n ur feet r blistered and acheing... the destination is so vague... n so unattainable...and unknown.. yet... this is the best of wat life has to offer... for wen u look back... u remember the times not wen the road was easy and the paths paved... u'll always recall the times when the path was full of thorny bushes n poison ivy... wen it hurt to just move an inch forward... wen u crawled... u'll emerge from these times... not defeated ... u'll emerge a 'triumphant'...
so wat do u wanna be... a defeated soldier...or a 'triumphant' .. a conquerer?
luv - ap :) |
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Re: I'm going now
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by gina on
Wednesday, 12th March 2003 @ 11:45:08 AM AEST
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i totally agree with bobotheclown i was gonna say the same thing abt those 2 stanzas...very moving poem ...very well written ..
GINA |
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Re: I'm going now
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by yellow_sundragon on
Thursday, 20th March 2003 @ 06:19:03 PM AEST
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This is a beautiful poem... and I hope the going is just a thought in a poem, and not what you really want to do. Honestly. The world would lose alot if it lost you.
And... did you ever think that your friends wouldn't leave you alone... because they care?
YS |
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Re: I'm going now
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by wyrd_faerie on
Thursday, 31st July 2003 @ 12:07:19 PM AEST
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oh emily...i know i have already commented on this but i was reading it, and i started crying, and i want to tell you everything that's been going through my head for a while.
emily, i love you. more than anything and more than anyone, you are my everything, you are the reason i am here and the reason i struggle to be here. i didn't know what true friendship was until i met you. and it's more than just friendship, isn't it? there's something in my heart that tells me i was destined to meet you, and something that tells me to hold on to you, never let go. and i'm never gonna let you let go em. because you're worth so much more than that. you can do anything if you put your mind to it, you know that? you can do anything, because i believe in you. i know who you are, and i know that you're capable of so much, you are so much more than you think. you're beautiful, and that will never change, no matter what. i love you em, i always have and i always will, forever,
lucie xxx |
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Re: I'm going now
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by M on
Wednesday, 6th August 2003 @ 10:25:26 AM AEST
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Oh baby... I'm crying in the middle of an internet cafe. I don't know what to say, Lucie. I feel the same way, and i always have too.
I will love you forever,
and ever...
and ever...
hunni, i love you.xXx |
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