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Speechless
Contributed by
SilverRain
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Friday, 8th February 2008 @ 09:02:11 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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‘How does it make you feel,’ you ask
How do you explain when everything in you screams out for more…
When all you want is to get closer, but never really getting there…
When your body tingles with a passion you don’t understand…
Speaks its own language as it folds into yours…
When your mind has no words that your mouth can express…
‘How does it make you feel,’ you ask
Speechless….
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2008-02-08 21:02:11]
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Re: Speechless
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 9th February 2008 @ 11:29:38 AM AEST
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speechless, perhaps .. but never wordless! :)
yeah .. I know of what you speak. And yeah, there are looks,
motions, even a "feeling", but never a sound need be uttered.
Actions are all one needs at times ~
Perfect speechlessness!!
~Breezy
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Re: Speechless
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by alibof10 on
Sunday, 23rd March 2008 @ 06:16:13 AM AEST
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| another masterpiece .. its an awesome poem! |
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Re: Speechless
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by Chanie on
Tuesday, 25th March 2008 @ 11:03:11 PM AEST
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Hmmm... This leaves me speechless....
STUNNING!!!!! |
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Re: Speechless
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by jantra on
Friday, 18th April 2008 @ 08:33:52 AM AEST
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This was quite beautiful, you have a gift for writing sensuous fluid verse. my only gripe would be with the layout of the poem. As it is its written with the lines way too long. there should be line breaks where natural pauses occur in the sentences to give the reader a pause and help your words have more strength and resonance. now bear in mind this is JUST a suggestion but i think the layout might be better like this
"How does it make you feel?,’
you ask.
How do you explain
when everything in you screams out for more?
When all you want
is to get closer,
but never really getting there.
When your body tingles
with a passion
that you don’t understand.
Speaks its own language
as it folds
into yours.
When your mind has no words
that your mouth can express.
‘How does it make you feel?"
you ask.
Speechless….
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