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In Slow Motion......I am Falling
Contributed by
unknown_utopia
on
Saturday, 26th January 2008 @ 08:13:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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My hands of clay
are melting
in slow motion
I am falling
deep into
a burning confusion
where bad things keep happening.
There is nothing really wrong
but i got a feeling
something ain't right,
Illusions run rampant
as addictions now control
and I no longer sleep at night.
Silently I am screaming
cause I don't know what to believe,
I only have
one friend
and he don't even like me.
Fantastic falls
crescendo
but no coherent Innervision are released,
teardrops flow
as confusion reigns
my dreamcatcher has abandoned me.
I really wanna to reach out
and touch something that is real
but with hands of clay
that are burning and melting away
I can no longer grasp
how to feel.
Copyright ©
unknown_utopia
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2008-01-26 20:13:52]
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Re: In Slow Motion......I am Falling
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by Poetic_Punk on
Sunday, 27th January 2008 @ 01:26:48 AM AEST
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| Alot of Colloquial language, not sure if that was intended in order to give the poem a certain feel but to me it lowers the quality of the poem, that aside tho not to bad |
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Re: In Slow Motion......I am Falling
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by STECKS on
Sunday, 27th January 2008 @ 04:44:16 AM AEST
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| I liked it .... I felt the inner Message with in |
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Re: In Slow Motion......I am Falling
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by emystar on
Sunday, 27th January 2008 @ 12:18:42 PM AEST
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Wo friend,
I'll catch you.
Awesome writing as always.
I luv your own personal style of writing.
It's great no matter why you do what.
The whole meaning comes thru loud and clear.
Big huggs,
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