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My Room
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143
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Saturday, 19th January 2008 @ 03:15:21 PM in AEST
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EmotionalPoetry
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I bring you home.....Into my room.....I bring you home..... To heel my wounds.....
I light the candles.....To fill the air.....And watch them glow.....Like your hair.....
It's your love that I feel.....It takes my breath away.....It's so unreal.....
In this room.....Can you feel.....Let's make love.....And keep it real.....
I love you Baby.....And your my Hun.....Let me love you.....Until the Sun.....
For when it's gone.....But never lost.....I'll be here waiting.....At any cost.....
By the way.....And may I say.....You made my day.....I'd wish you'd stay.....
But just know.....Before you go.....I love you still.....I always will.....
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Re: My Room
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by moonlight-gazing on
Sunday, 20th January 2008 @ 12:58:08 AM AEST
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| its so hard being in this situation.... i can compleely understand what you are saying.....:) |
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Re: My Room
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by UnknownLegend on
Sunday, 20th January 2008 @ 01:35:26 AM AEST
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| I really don't understand this situation, unless this is a poetic form of , ....you can't let go. The first 3 lines did make sense and were quite pretty with emotional and poetic construction but ,you got lost in the rhyme on the last verse and it sounded more like a rap song. All in all a nice write |
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