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A Soldier Reports To God.
Contributed by
The_Phantom
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Monday, 29th July 2002 @ 10:07:41 PM in AEST
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The soldier stood and face his God, which must always come to pass,
He hoped his shoes were shining, just as bright as his brass,
Step forward now you soldier, how should I deal with you,
Have you always turned the other cheek, to my church have you been true,
The soldier squared his shoulders and said, no Lord I guess I ain't,
Becuse those of us that carry guns can't always be a saints,
But I never took a penny that wasn't mine to keep,
Though I worked alot of overtime when the bills got too steep,
I never passed a cry for help, though at times I shook with fear,
And sometimes, God forgive me I wept unmanly tears,
I know I don't deserve a place among the people here,
They never wanted me around except to calm their fears,
If you've a place for me here, Lord it needn't be so grand,
I never expected or had much, but if you don't I'll understand,
Step forward now you soldier, you've borne your burdens well,
Walk peacefully on heaven's streets, you've done your time in hell.
Forever Faithful
The Phantom
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Jim_Cundiff on
Monday, 29th July 2002 @ 10:10:22 PM AEST
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| Some of those "unmanly tears" are welling in the corner of my eyes right now. Well said. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by chatabox on
Tuesday, 30th July 2002 @ 01:54:11 AM AEST
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| my goodness, one of the most beautiful poems I have read for a long time. Exquisite words. So delicately intense. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by The_Phantom on
Monday, 5th August 2002 @ 09:08:37 PM AEST
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Thank you very much for your comments. I feel the soldier must be remembered too.
Forever Faithful
The Phantom |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Smackmeplz24 on
Monday, 26th August 2002 @ 04:44:19 PM AEST
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| OMG that was the best poem i have ever read. you can not imagin the feeling that swept over me as i read it. ive read it over 5 times and i cant stop just yet i commend u on the finest piece i have ever seen. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by The_Phantom on
Tuesday, 5th November 2002 @ 06:43:18 PM AEST
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Thank you, this is a part of me, my heart I'm glad you enjoyed it.
The Phantom |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by OreO on
Saturday, 9th November 2002 @ 11:14:31 AM AEST
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This has me in tears
most of my family was in
the service, this was one
of the most beautiful writes
i've read in a long time
Thank you for sharing
this part of you .
.::´¯`·..· OreO·..·´¯`::.
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Mad-Mancunian on
Saturday, 8th February 2003 @ 10:53:01 PM AEST
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He puts down well the dilemna faced by all good men-at-arms:
"The soldier squared his shoulders and said, no Lord I guess I ain't,/ Becuse those of us that carry guns can't always be a saints,..."
As Zao said in "Die Another Day"-one man's terrorist is another man's freedom fighter, but hey, exactly how many of us actually never made a single mistake? you tell me! |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 13th February 2003 @ 06:49:41 AM AEST
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| speechless.............. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Unholy_Soldier on
Wednesday, 19th February 2003 @ 02:33:54 PM AEST
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Not to pop anyones bubble but i've seen this one before... about a year ago... so I'm gonna be blunt most military men have seen it after boot camp.
Its not new is as best i can say sorry to be annoying but hey what eles can I say he cant take the credit ... now if i see proof of copyright sure he made the poem.
The Fallen Knight,
Unholy_Soldier |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Mick_Puttock on
Thursday, 20th February 2003 @ 04:46:17 AM AEST
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| Although I am looking into this, after extensive searching, I am unable to dispute the copyright of this poem at this time!. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 23rd February 2003 @ 06:38:03 AM AEST
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| well i think this poem is beautifully written and the other poems that phantom has written are beautiful aswell. thankyou pahntom for writeing such beautiful poetry with us. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by riverofwords on
Sunday, 23rd February 2003 @ 09:13:41 PM AEST
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this is a very touching write and yes tears here also
a very moving and strong poem made more personal cause my son is in the military
no words can describe or do justice to this
thank you
Peace be your journey
Terry
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Tanna on
Monday, 24th February 2003 @ 08:32:45 AM AEST
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Regardless of who wrote it, I'm glad it was posted. It is a beautiful piece. People would do well to remember that there is a person, a human, a soul ... behind the mask of the soldier.
So I thank you Phantom, for posting it - especially at this time.
~Tanna |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by WordPoet on
Friday, 7th March 2003 @ 05:10:00 PM AEST
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| Excellent write and very well told. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Dot on
Tuesday, 11th March 2003 @ 03:16:22 PM AEST
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| I think this is a beautiful poem. Your words are right out of the mouth of a soldier. Good work. Dot |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Kane on
Thursday, 27th March 2003 @ 12:24:56 AM AEST
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Very strong poem, strange fella this Phantom, very well written I should say.
Kane |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by venkat on
Saturday, 29th March 2003 @ 01:18:53 AM AEST
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| " walk peacefully on heavens streets,you have done your time in hell " excellenct conclusion... dearest , Phantom.. i love your pure divine spirit.. Your comments on " knowledge of time " and " let him go to hell" made great impression on me my friend. I loved the way ' your conversation with god' thats my fave poem.. thank you my dear friend.. with love and respect.. venkat |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 12th April 2003 @ 08:55:50 AM AEST
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| From a military man myself i know the fears and anxiety of all of us as we pick up our weapons...fearing what we do is right...fearing not for God or country but the people that love us. Truly an amazing poem |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by BlackFire9786 on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 04:37:56 PM AEST
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| Wow, this is such a beautiful poem, especially the last line i had my dad read it who was in vietnam and he cried, this was so beautiful, one of the best poems here. Lisa |
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by BlackFire9786 on
Friday, 6th June 2003 @ 04:38:28 PM AEST
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| Wow, this is such a beautiful poem, especially the last line i had my dad read it who was in vietnam and he cried, this was so beautiful, one of the best poems here. Luv ya lotz-Lisa |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by The_Phantom on
Thursday, 19th June 2003 @ 10:16:10 PM AEST
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Hey Unholy_Soldier, your only a young teenager, your not even a soldier, anyway I wrote theis poem in 1990. so yeah you might have read this before, a word of advice though before you knock someone do your homework ok.
The Phantom |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by The_Phantom on
Thursday, 19th June 2003 @ 10:16:50 PM AEST
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Hey Unholy_Soldier, your only a young teenager, your not even a soldier, anyway I wrote theis poem in 1990. so yeah you might have read this before, a word of advice though before you knock someone do your homework ok.
The Phantom |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by tinka_belle on
Monday, 23rd June 2003 @ 08:13:44 AM AEST
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speechless
that poem
i dont know what to say
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by The_Phantom on
Monday, 23rd June 2003 @ 08:43:28 AM AEST
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Thank you for your kind words. Though I don't know if I've earned them.
The Phantom |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Archie on
Sunday, 2nd May 2004 @ 02:08:06 PM AEST
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| Very good poem although I don't believe it will quite go that way. Very tight rhyming scheme and personal unique theme. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by AsILayDying on
Tuesday, 12th October 2004 @ 05:14:24 PM AEST
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| Theirs somthing like this in an e-mail somoene sent me awhile ago and also the "served time in hell" which is hands down the best line, is the quote in the begining of "Medal Of Honor" ...a video game |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by gt on
Friday, 15th October 2004 @ 12:38:18 AM AEST
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I've heard things with a similar message to the last line of this before, but to my knowledge the poem as a whole is original.
All in all, its really good. The rhythym is held well, the simple rhyme scheme really suits the poem. However, theres just one criticisms I have. The idea of the soldier having done his time in hell isnt really built up in the poem. Until the last couplet, it seems to be about how he has conducted himself, and so the message seems a bit seperated from the rest of it to me.
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by AndTheFoolShallBurn on
Wednesday, 20th October 2004 @ 02:25:31 PM AEST
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| Incredible. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by TheSpiritx on
Wednesday, 2nd February 2005 @ 09:14:38 AM AEST
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Great poem. It's given me a bit to think about, being a soldier myself.
I enjoyed your write and appreciate your having posted it. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Claire890 on
Monday, 29th May 2006 @ 06:25:21 PM AEST
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| excellent poem... of which though there are variations of everywhere nowadays. still great though. |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by anonymous1212 on
Sunday, 27th January 2008 @ 09:36:58 AM AEST
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| WOW....that gave me goose bumps...cant think of any better way to say what u just have...great job! |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by Darin on
Monday, 8th June 2009 @ 02:35:50 PM AEST
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| Very well said. Great work here. Thanks for writing brother! |
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Re: A Soldier Reports To God.
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by ScaramangaSilk on
Wednesday, 15th July 2009 @ 05:11:32 AM AEST
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| An interesting angle on the dilemma of a soldier. |
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