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Breathe, darling
Contributed by
drtylilsecret
on
Monday, 7th January 2008 @ 11:39:26 AM in AEST
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Comforting arms morph into a straightjacket
And its hold will not let go
Paralyzed in mind and body
She lacks the strength
She lacks the will,
She lacks the hope—to let it go
Its grip too strong around her chest
There’s a suffocating heart inside
Only one way for it to turn to red from blue
And that’s his affection—revived anew
Only his love
Will resuscitate it enough
For the blood to pump
Just once again
Another touch—
Another beat
Another touch—
Another gasp
Just one kiss—
And she’ll inhale life
Just one breath,
And she’ll breathe too.
She speaks of tears and hurt,
Of a dilapidated heart.
Only two ways to alleviate the pain
One is him.
The other death.
And she’s already traced a vein…
With his permission
She’s set free
A noose of braided fantasies
Emancipated, for all eternity
But there’s a chain
Around her ankle
Imprisoning her, to misery.
But, with another touch—
There’s another beat,
Another touch—
Another gasp
Just one kiss—
And she’ll inhale life
Just one breath—
And she’ll breathe too
Once a stare that elicited smiles
Now will only bring a storm
And rain pour out
—Tainting trembling lips
A thunder, her choked sobs
She’s been poisoned
He’s got the cure—
She’s been poisoned—
He is he cure
But the price is much too high
And grandiose wishes cannot afford to buy
Another touch—
Another beat
(Fallen shards of a shattered heart)
Another touch—
Another gasp
(Oh intertwined they’re a work of art)
Just one kiss—
And she’ll inhale life
Just one breathe—
And she’ll breath too—
It’ll turn her heart to red from blue,
A merited bliss long overdue
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drtylilsecret
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2008-01-07 11:39:26]
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Re: Breathe, darling
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 7th January 2008 @ 12:16:08 PM AEST
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hey, you commented me - and i thank you much.
yes, i still play soccer, and still write a bunch, although not as much. quality over quantity, i think.
and wow. this... this write is amazing. definitely missed you on here! lol. it's.. touching? it's realistic, yet in a very unrealistic, fantasy kind of way. if that makes sense. lots of imagery, pain - yet hope?
any way.. i like it.
- Bethani - |
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Re: Breathe, darling
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by JohnYamrus on
Monday, 7th January 2008 @ 01:22:57 PM AEST
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i see this is posted under song lyrics, so it's difficult to really assess or comment on this, but it seems to me you really have a clue as to what you're doing and that you have a way with the word. please, if you have the time and the inclination, write me direct at jyamrus@aol.com and send me some of yr poetry to look at. i'd love to see what else you have. send it as a file or copy/paste into an e-mail.
i'd love to read more.
best.
yamrus |
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Re: Breathe, darling
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by emystar on
Monday, 7th January 2008 @ 05:24:01 PM AEST
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Very strong, creative write.
huggs,
emy
Welcome back. |
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Re: Breathe, darling
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by needledancing on
Tuesday, 8th January 2008 @ 12:12:12 AM AEST
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| A very powerful write to reflect a heart that has suffered long and hungers for the soul of its being. Well written and shows the depth of a lifetime the committment of our emotional being.Excellent. Welcome back my friend. |
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Re: Breathe, darling
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by ki on
Tuesday, 8th January 2008 @ 12:14:03 AM AEST
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beautifully written, your point is well taken...would love to hear more from u !!!
ki |
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Re: Breathe, darling
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by kaycas on
Tuesday, 8th January 2008 @ 12:19:01 PM AEST
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Hi, You commented on my poem
Putting on The Smile earlier and I like to repay the compliment. This is my first day on this site. Anyway I went to your poem list and found that you had just posted this today after some break. It seems to me that if you can break off and come back with something like this then you have a natural talent. It is very emotional and for my first read I give it top marks. |
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Re: Breathe, darling
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by Tweeky on
Friday, 1st February 2008 @ 09:39:35 AM AEST
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A beautiful song hun , well done .
claire xx |
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