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Don't Ok:
Contributed by
RICHARD_CAMPBELL
on
Wednesday, 2nd January 2008 @ 07:47:41 AM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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Only one person as the right
to tell you what to do.
its not your mom or dad
o no dude.
he gave it all up
just for you.
leaving his kingdom
to live among us cool.
you still don't have a clue!
o boy that rude,
choose.
Copyright ©
RICHARD_CAMPBELL
... [
2008-01-02 07:47:41]
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Re: Don't Ok:
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd January 2008 @ 09:06:40 AM AEST
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| i really wanted to feel what youre saying here. i reread it three times but i still didnt feel like it made much sense . "o boy that rude, choose."?? it doesnt make sense sorry. im sure it came from an honest and real place but you have to make it easier for the reader to get there with you |
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Re: Don't Ok:
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd January 2008 @ 09:56:38 AM AEST
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| hey im all for making the reader think but i think most people arent gonna try that hard. if you make your thoughts so obscure no one can follow it people are just gonna give up on it altogether. cheers to you mate sorry if i hurt your feelings i wasnt trying to be mean ;) |
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