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Don't give up on me

Contributed by MissTeenSuicide on Tuesday, 1st January 2008 @ 10:45:42 PM in AEST
Topic: selfstruggles



I have disintegrated in your eyes
The fire, the hate in you, lo,
It's my demise
Why do you despise me so??

I have nowhere to go
I wish someone would
Show me the way-
Light it up
Through the dark
It's just my luck
For this to start

Stay with me
Help me out
Set me free
Tell me what this is all about

Maybe I'm just dramatic
But what if I have a point
It doesn’t help to be empathetic
Because all I do is disappoint

I wipe away my tears
With my arm of searing scars
Being attacked by all my fears
Before I'm up behind these iron bars

Is it that time again??
Time to fake a smile
Yes I'm fine, I've always been
You'd think I wasn’t so defiled

But I wasn't part of the setting today
You noticed I was there alone
But why would you care anyway?
If I die, or burn, or turn to stone?

Please stay with me
I am too faltering
Please help me see
What this is all about




Copyright © MissTeenSuicide ... [ 2008-01-01 22:45:42]
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Re: Don't give up on me (User Rating: 1 )
by crazy on Wednesday, 2nd January 2008 @ 03:53:59 PM AEST
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"is it that time again? to fake a smile."
i live this every f***ing day of my life.


Re: Don't give up on me (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Thursday, 3rd January 2008 @ 09:15:39 AM AEST
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i think you have a lot of potential, your poem takes me back to my own teen years when i wore black and wrote angry poems in small letters ;) the only line i'd nitpick is "its just my luck for this to start" it either needs to be expounded on so the reader understands what exactly is starting or deleted altogether because right now it doesnt make a lot of sense and overall is unnecessary


Re: Don't give up on me (User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on Monday, 5th October 2009 @ 07:03:38 AM AEST
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You definitely started off well. This was emotional but it remained coherant. Many people can do the emotion, but it comes out all wrong. Not in your case though.

-Phil




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