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A Distant Love
Contributed by
degrassirocz
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Monday, 31st December 2007 @ 05:02:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Angels are real, but there are only one or two.
I know they are real because I have met you.
With your wings you sweep me into the sky,
Which melts my heart, sending me into a high.
You have been gifed with the essence of love,
While your physical form is as beautiful as a dove.
Allthough I have drifted to another,
An infatuation is not a true lover.
I will be here with you and will never part,
Even though you have not given me your heart.
I want our relationship to be much stronger,
And also last ever the longer.
I ask for the honer of being a boyfriend to you,
And I pray that you want the same thing too.
Weather you say yes or no.
I just want you to know,
That whatever you say,
I will always stay
I love you
I know that I have said this before.
I just had the passion to say it once more.
Copyright ©
degrassirocz
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2007-12-31 17:02:14]
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Re: A Distant Love
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by emystar on
Monday, 31st December 2007 @ 05:25:23 PM AEST
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This is incredible from the first word to the very last.
What's not to luv?
If you luv with your heart the way you write then someone is very fortunate to have your luv bestowed upon them.
welcome to our global family of writers.
huggs, smiles, Merry New Year,
emy
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Re: A Distant Love
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by ki on
Tuesday, 1st January 2008 @ 12:56:11 AM AEST
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AWWWW!!this is tooo sweet!!lovin it!!keep it up!
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Re: A Distant Love
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by JohnYamrus on
Tuesday, 1st January 2008 @ 02:22:15 AM AEST
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you need to tighten your focus on this one. you seem to be going in opposite directions with it. you love her. you've drifted away. she's not given you her heart. it seems you can't make up your mind. also, there's a typo on the word "honor".
try re-working this a bit and it'll get stronger for you.
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Re: A Distant Love
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by MemeCaroline on
Friday, 4th January 2008 @ 05:08:06 AM AEST
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| I always enjoy reading your poetry. You come across as a kind and caring person. I'm glad to see that you are challenging yourself poetically with attempting rhyme. Keep spreading your wings. |
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