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Making the best of a smooth step
Contributed by
harmony
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Thursday, 20th December 2007 @ 08:04:05 AM in AEST
Topic:
surreal
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I present to you
Two men talking
Halfway up a flight of stairs
"We love the smoothness of this step"
The others damaged by the sea
Sea to the left and a room to the right
and at the bottom
without a light
A lighthouse
Copyright ©
harmony
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2007-12-20 08:04:05] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Making the best of a smooth step
(User Rating: 1 ) by Silent-No-More on
Thursday, 20th December 2007 @ 02:33:08 PM AEST (User
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I love that you didn't hand this to the reader entirely and adore the open ended'ness of references like "the others". To me, poetry is most appealing when it is representative of the poet's musing and what falls out on to the page is not so much constructed as what just naturally landed there of its own accord. The best poems, I think, prompt the reader to thought and wondering and, sometimes, gives the poet something to gnaw on as well. There should always be, I believe, something more in a poem than the words themselves.
Brief piece here - but not in thought. Well done.
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