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Senseless.
Contributed by
bleedthelove
on
Thursday, 13th December 2007 @ 05:00:09 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Blind my lungs and suffocate my eyes
Breathe life into me, until my limp body dies
Expose my soul, leave me to hide
Shackle me in chains but leave me untied
Treat me delicate, suffer me with violence
Sing to me softly as you leave me waiting in silence
Help me understand, leave me in dismay
Hold me in your arms as your shoving me away
Because just like this poem
Nothing you do makes sense anyway
So tear me apart as you make me whole
Heal my wounds as you murder my soul
Promise me the world and break your word
Because you actually loving me is simply absurd
Have me wish upon a star as you tear them out of the sky
And just like a fool I continue to try
Because like you said...
I'm always prettier when I cry
So stand by my side as you walk away
Because just like this poem...
Nothing you do makes sense anyway.
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Re: Senseless.
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by XbloodyromanceX on
Thursday, 13th December 2007 @ 04:14:31 PM AEST
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| i think that this an amazing poem. |
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Re: Senseless.
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by PhantomVampyress on
Thursday, 13th December 2007 @ 05:22:19 PM AEST
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as always and intense passionate expressive powerful write.. I always like your writing.. keep it up. glad to see you writing more.. this is very exquisite.. i love the flow too and espeically the last few lines..
rock on,
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Re: Senseless.
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by HarrisonRoosevelt on
Thursday, 13th December 2007 @ 10:47:03 PM AEST
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Well done. You've definitely got some great lines in here and it flows nicely. I especially loved, "Hold me in your arms as your shoving me away" and "So stand by my side as you walk away".
I look forward to reading more of your work. |
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Re: Senseless.
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by tiggytom on
Friday, 14th December 2007 @ 10:27:16 AM AEST
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I agree with the above comments
I love the flow and the contradiction in the lines such as "Shackle me in chains but leave me untied"
Great stuff
Tom |
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