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keep the lies coming
Contributed by
tears_of_blood
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Wednesday, 12th December 2007 @ 03:15:44 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Every one likes to talk and look
Every one likes to hear what you say
Every one believes in the words others say
Every one looks at you and tells you its ok
Every one tells you not to be afeard
Every one tells you one thing but means some thing else
Every one lies to you every day
Every one makes plans but never keeps them
Every one tells me I’m a good person but I see the lies
Every one told me I would be the best but the best in what eyes
Every one told me they love hanging with me so why don’t they
Why do they wake away
Why do they look away
Why do they talk to some one else
Why do they lie to me every day
All I do is sit a wait hope and dream of a better day
A day where I can feel love and not hate
A day where people mean what they say
A day that I don’t cry all myself asleep
A day where I don’t have to bleed to take away my pain
So I ask you not to lie anymore to me cause I cant take the pain
And of you keep it up the end will come soon
For the cut will bleed out all the pain of me
I’m done with crying and hurting every day
No more lies in my eyes that’s all I ask for you.
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Re: keep the lies coming
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by sadaddy on
Wednesday, 12th December 2007 @ 04:41:18 PM AEST
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Well here is a little truth for me to you, overall I thought it was a nice expression of your feelings. However, here are a few things that could help you the next time you write a poem, it is “everyone” not “every one”, it is “everyday” not “every day”, it is “someone” not “some one”, and it is “afraid” not “afeard”. I point this out to you because it shows your age and level of writing skills. It is not meant to hurt your feelings. May peace and joy once again fill your heart soon.
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Re: keep the lies coming
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by TheGrimReapersHourglass on
Thursday, 13th December 2007 @ 03:14:37 AM AEST
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| A-Lies-of-Guns&Roses-cd,cassette,album,8-track?oh-would be a good description very honest poem if not non fiction Eyes of the beholder-Up Up Up And Down Turn Turn Turn Turn Around-My Labido A Mesquito-Whos ever titled to this may it be known if not as above For whom I saww,The Man In The Mirror was it all.Comment from The Grim Reaper,DevilsPriest KnownAs LORD,Denver L. Jr. |
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