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Alone
Contributed by
Maccabeus
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Thursday, 6th December 2007 @ 05:04:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Alone
I’ve always been alone.
I’ve never been loud.
But something is different,
Alone in a crowd.
Nothing relates,
Nothing connects,
Nobody asks,
And No one suspects.
I’ve never made a connections,
Or stayed very long,
Never made a best friend,
Never felt like I do belong.
I’ve gotten almost everything,
I’ve not seen the end in so long,
But I’ve never gotten what I really want,
And what I need all along.
And that what I want,
I never will have,
That which I seek,
Will never be done.
This hole in my chest,
Will never be filled,
Full of cold and of ice,
That can only build.
So I sit in my igloo,
Alone in my home,
Stationary and waiting,
Forever Alone.
Copyright ©
Maccabeus
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2007-12-06 05:04:14]
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Re: Alone
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by brownsugar8272 on
Thursday, 6th December 2007 @ 05:44:21 AM AEST
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| In my experience just when you think you are in the worst possible situation someone always has it worse. You are not the only one who feels alone and you have a great emotional way of expressing your feelings. |
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Re: Alone
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by killer1whale on
Thursday, 6th December 2007 @ 07:47:32 AM AEST
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| Several people are alone in this world and I think this peom will relate to them. I love how you express your feelings. |
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Re: Alone
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by Honey56 on
Thursday, 6th December 2007 @ 09:36:17 AM AEST
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| Nice post.. |
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Re: Alone
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by yackerz85 on
Thursday, 6th December 2007 @ 11:52:04 AM AEST
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I love it. Its very good and very expressive. Something I can completely relate too...
~Mark |
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Re: Alone
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by Butterat_Zool on
Sunday, 16th December 2007 @ 07:34:49 AM AEST
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I was hoping that after you gave such a sharp criticism to a poem that i wrote when i was fifteen, you would have some incredible pieces posted on the site and would be able to maybe teach me a thing or two.
All three of your poems on this site say the same thing. All three of them bored me before i got to the end. If you want to be a respectable writer, take out the sentimentality. Your readers won't care if you're alone unless your loneliness reflects their own loneliness. By being personal and sappy, you prevent or retard that connection.
That's okay, though. It appears that you're still young. You write at a 9th or 10th grade level, so hopefully you have plenty of time to grow into your poetry. Maybe one day you'll understand my poem "Sex Machine". In all likelihood, you aren't really interested, and that's your right, but if you want to get better at poetry, then the best way is to read the works of better poets.
Peace be with you.
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Re: Alone
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by Maccabeus on
Monday, 17th December 2007 @ 10:21:30 AM AEST
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| Hey, just because I gave your poem a crappy rating, doesn't mean you have to add a *****y little comment. I have no idea whatsoever what you are talking about. If you want to be a ***** and try to be an ass about it keep it personal and send A PERSONAL MESSAGE! |
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