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Maybe Soon
Contributed by
lostinmyself
on
Monday, 26th November 2007 @ 12:03:03 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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{This is only good for me,
the pain can leech out all the rage,
and cast it out into the sky,
so I will never have to feel.}
The betrayal will not burn my skin,
each lie won't smolder deep within,
and I'll move on...
I'll cry and hope,
I'll live with both,
and the feelings won't consume me then,
I'll not let them take my world,
and somehow they won't rule my life,
and I will learn to breathe again.
This is so good for me,
the pain won't last for every day,
and maybe soon, I just won't feel,
the fire, when I look his way,
Perhaps I'll hold my head up high,
and maybe soon the tears won't start,
when I look him in the eye.
And maybe soon I'll just move on
And maybe then,
I'll feel my heart
And I won't remember all the tears
that almost tore my life apart.
This is good for me, the pain,
it reminds me that I'm still alive,
that even though it hurts inside,
there are still ways I can survive.
So I'll cry and hope and I'll move on,
and maybe that will heal the burn,
this pain works hard to make me strong,
to teach me that it helps to hurt.
and maybe soon,
I'll raise my head,
to find it all feels like a dream,
and perhaps one day I just won't care,
to look back at how it could have been,
and maybe then, the fires' burn,
will help to cleanse my soul in turn
and I'll find a way to remember love,
without letting them return.
Maybe soon
Each word won't send the flames up higher,
each tear I cry won't feed the fire,
and the rage will wash away.
I cry, and hope, and pray
Maybe soon.
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2007-11-26 12:03:03] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Maybe Soon
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Monday, 26th November 2007 @ 12:16:08 PM AEST (User
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Very sad but well written.
Hope you feel better soon.
huggs,
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Re: Maybe Soon
(User Rating: 1 ) by Crow on
Monday, 26th November 2007 @ 02:34:07 PM AEST (User
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Holy crap! this is just awesome..I`m just stunned by the flow..and the lyrical pace of this..out damn standing!!! lol! |
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Re: Maybe Soon
(User Rating: 1 ) by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 26th November 2007 @ 02:34:51 PM AEST (User
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Very powerful write, Phil. I kinda dig the way you made this jagged and rocky in feel and flow, much as the feelings that were shared. Very emotive piece of writing.
Peace, love and hugs,
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Re: Maybe Soon
(User Rating: 1 ) by pixie on
Monday, 26th November 2007 @ 08:16:04 PM AEST (User
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This is the first 1 I've read from you since being back and my god girl you've improved so much, you've always had a great talent for poetry but you have grown greatly as a writer, well done with this Philly *hugs*
Pix xx |
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Re: Maybe Soon
(User Rating: 1 ) by Wachumiri on
Saturday, 1st December 2007 @ 06:56:33 AM AEST (User
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It's hard to write sadness in a way that doesn't sound like complaining, but you write it well. YOu face it, knowing it's a part of life, something we all live with, and need to learn from. And it flowed so well, it was over too soon, yet it said so much.
Take care, friend. Smile.
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Re: Maybe Soon
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th January 2008 @ 02:26:45 AM AEST (User
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Oh hun, I have to agree with Jarred and Pix. WOW. This is one of your very best, sweets!
I feel pain and loss, but also a hope; a pleasantness that only "hope" can bring swimming among your words.
The piece itself, (as far as wording and all), is exceptional. It truly truly is. This is what I'd aspire to be
able to do. (It inspires me to NO end, hun). But the content, well, wow! There is actually a positive emotion
that soothes the ache inside each verse. It is unequivocally and undeniably brilliant.
Outstanding work, hun. So glad to have read this today. Soon will come, if it already hasn't.
*hugs times a million*
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Re: Maybe Soon
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th June 2008 @ 01:46:02 AM AEST (User
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I'm not even sure how to comment on this one....I'll try...
The content of this is sooo intense! The strength of both the pain and the hope, somehow at odds, yet intertwined almost as one.
Powerful would be a good word...yes, powerful! |
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Re: Maybe Soon
(User Rating: 1 ) by Loende on
Sunday, 6th July 2008 @ 06:00:38 PM AEST (User
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My Kindred Sister, I hope for both of our sakes that this is truth. I understand your sadness and how much is weighs. Mayhap we can share the burden together and actually love again. I love you.
Be well,
Dawn |
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