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karma bites
Contributed by
Phantomvampyress
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Friday, 23rd November 2007 @ 01:09:46 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Things i've said brought everything to a head
to end it all this very night
Turn the pages
black shines light
left me there
I only blame myself
things I've brought from the old shelf
Good inside
lost and lied
shut me out
brown me away so i fade
Karma always makes its way
somewhere today
somehow I fell into the trap of wonderancy by chance
Sew my mouth shut tight
so it don't open to unleash pain
help me stop before I drown inside my own rain
Vampyress Jenni
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Re: karma bites
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by candysears on
Friday, 23rd November 2007 @ 02:17:20 PM AEST
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| I enjoyed reading your post..Excellent! |
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Re: karma bites
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 23rd November 2007 @ 03:04:52 PM AEST
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Jen,
Interesting structure to this piece. I really liked that last stanza, especially the last line...
"help me stop before I drown inside my own rain"
I don't believe wonderancy is a word, though, or is that just a typo?
Great writing, Jennittude. Always full of meaning and life.
Peace, love and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: karma bites
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by Crow on
Friday, 23rd November 2007 @ 04:31:32 PM AEST
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| o`damn,, sleeping dogs" let them lie I guess is the best..I like this..the riddled verses.. Vincent |
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Re: karma bites
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by shelby on
Friday, 23rd November 2007 @ 05:48:05 PM AEST
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Oh how true, the karma doesn't seem to bite others as soon as it should but can come back around to bite us sure enough in a quick fancy......
Helpt me stop before I drown inside my own rain......
Raw and powerful truth there.
Michelle
( who needs to bite her tongue and chose my battles better at times lol) |
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Re: karma bites
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 25th November 2007 @ 02:37:28 AM AEST
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You know Jenn, i was gonna highlight certain lines i though were awesome,
but as i read it i change my mind, i had
2 , cause i would have had 2 higlight
the whole poem,lol. power packed as
usual, great writting Jenni, a treat 2 read,
take care . . .
Ben
bjps
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myheartsvoice |
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Re: karma bites
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by ravensofthedark on
Friday, 30th November 2007 @ 12:34:24 PM AEST
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I can see the darkness here, I'm aware of these things, so that's why I'm here with the solution, do not despair, for seeking vengeance and equality may be the way, it's not fair so keep going and don't give up yet, but VERY good write
~ The Raven |
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Re: karma bites
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by beefybeebuzz on
Saturday, 15th December 2007 @ 07:06:39 AM AEST
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| painful but pleasant because it was effective in getting your feelings across |
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Re: karma bites
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by beefybeebuzz on
Saturday, 15th December 2007 @ 07:07:25 AM AEST
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i meant painful as in the theme not as in reading it by the way,
i loved it |
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Re: karma bites
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by yangdantien on
Wednesday, 7th May 2008 @ 06:17:30 AM AEST
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Karma also swallows us whole. I like this piece as it filled me with a sense of your longing and wisdom not to entirely suffer it. Excellent thank you.
peace
AJ |
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Re: karma bites
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by eternalsunshine on
Sunday, 29th June 2008 @ 08:49:20 AM AEST
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nice write, it lets you think back on your own life how karma always have bitten back...
much love to you;) |
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Re: karma bites
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 23rd May 2014 @ 02:20:15 PM AEST
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had to read it love the title, its sad but so
beautifully expressed,
hugs n' love nessa |
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