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lies and decits
Contributed by
seafire
on
Saturday, 17th November 2007 @ 02:35:19 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Lies and decits
will tear you down
lies and deceit
go round and round
lies and deceit
thrown in your face
lies and deceit
will meet its fate
Mare
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seafire
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2007-11-17 14:35:19] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: lies and decits
(User Rating: 1 ) by Woodsy102 on
Saturday, 17th November 2007 @ 04:52:20 PM AEST (User
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Seems very true and a lot of people could probably relate to it.
The only thing i suggest is trying to find a proper way to make lines 6 and 8 rhyme, since this was your pattern with 2 and 4.
The rhyme seems forced in other words. |
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