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Elizabeth's Halo
Contributed by
ucka
on
Thursday, 6th March 2003 @ 08:00:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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I
I am sure that it was long ago
That your halo was forged
In the half tone light of an upper room
In the half hearted whisper of an untruth
And he never heard the hammer strokes
His words, a slant of light,
And you, the particle
His voice, a wind,
And you, illuminated,
In the morning light
And tossed about the currents
To settle down, here or there
And left to rest by he
Who does no keeping
II
You are not sure how long ago it was
That betrayal was remembered
And left a scar in the palm of memory
In the half crescent halo of broken hearts
And he never felt you tremble beneath heavy strokes
His words, a slant of light
And you, a window
His voice, the space between
And you, radiant,
In the morning light
Your color thrown about the room
Your angles changing, as he revolves
And left to rest by he
As he moves on
III
Now there is a better silence
Between the spaces of the past
Enveloped in the richness of the present
In the half written twilight of the future
And your halo, crowning, not for want of it
His words, a slant of light
And you, a page
His voice, softly touching,
And you, ablaze
Even in the darkness
Your story – poetic in step
An entirety, despite progression
And left to rest in a moment
You choose to keep
Copyright ©
ucka
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2003-03-06 20:00:00]
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Re: Elizabeth's Halo
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by LOWMAN613 on
Thursday, 6th March 2003 @ 11:18:18 PM AEST
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| Wow This was really a great peice,I liked this a lot! Christina |
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Re: Elizabeth's Halo
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by NicklePickle on
Sunday, 23rd March 2003 @ 06:10:39 AM AEST
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I like the approach to the situation.
"Scar in the palm of memory" is truly unique and inspired. I'd love to read more of your works. |
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Re: Elizabeth's Halo
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by kolbrun on
Wednesday, 16th April 2003 @ 12:16:10 PM AEST
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| stunningly beautiful...........love your style:) |
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Re: Elizabeth's Halo
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by razorbladerose on
Friday, 2nd May 2003 @ 09:31:51 AM AEST
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| It is thanks to writers like you, that inspiration in other writers exists! This is remarkable! You have to keep writing and submiting! I want to read all of it...you got me addicted!Please pm me when u have more posted! |
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Re: Elizabeth's Halo
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by Merry on
Thursday, 18th September 2003 @ 11:22:24 AM AEST
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an incredibly tight poem wonderful craftsmenship - I sense a reluctant awe in this piece - beautiful etheral images
merry |
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