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TRYING TO BREATHE
Contributed by
brew
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Tuesday, 23rd October 2007 @ 11:35:09 AM in AEST
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Ever feel you are being pulled out?
Pulled under
Pulled so far: you cant stretch a single inch...
How can you keep all
what do you do to make it work?
Do you single handed, just scream and make the best?
I dont ...know...gasp
Seems it does not always comply
Makes more than what is to the eye, more complex
Breathe
Sigh
Shed a tear
Keep going
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Re: TRYING TO BREATHE
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by Silent-No-More on
Tuesday, 23rd October 2007 @ 03:42:25 PM AEST
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Awww, brew.... YES - keep going. One step at a time, hun, is all anyone can do. And hope... always, always, hope.
It will get better. There is always sunshine after the rain --- you'll find it. It's hard sometimes, it takes time sometime... but you will.
Trust time, trust Fate and trust yourself - and yes --- Breathe, Sigh, Shed a tear, Keep Going.
*hugs*
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Re: TRYING TO BREATHE
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by fielding88 on
Tuesday, 23rd October 2007 @ 05:23:03 PM AEST
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| Well this was quite the enjoyable read. It has that almost proverbial stanza at the end that encapsulated such a great idea, it's still reverberating with me after I read it. I really liked this one, good job on it. |
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Re: TRYING TO BREATHE
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 24th October 2007 @ 01:57:45 AM AEST
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"Breathe
Sigh
Shed a tear
Keep going"
Yes indeed, my friend. The journey can be so damn difficult and painful....but yeah, gotta keep going.
"Keep Truckin' On" as the Grateful Dead would say. *smile and wink*
Take care, Brew...it would seem we're all in this restless state of being.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: TRYING TO BREATHE
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by Dom on
Wednesday, 24th October 2007 @ 05:31:36 AM AEST
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You have to climb the mountain to come joyfully tumbling down the other side. We have to plough on to get there, and crying helps when it all gets too much. But damn isn't that other side just so worth it?!
Dom |
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Re: TRYING TO BREATHE
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th October 2007 @ 02:19:34 AM AEST
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Oh my, Dayna girl! wow .. what EMOTION in those last four lines! Damn,
hun, in the whole piece, really! This was truly thinking-out-loud poetry.
And there is a depth here that we all find ourselves trying to tread. We
cannot change what others think, feel or see, but we CAN be the best
that WE can be, yeah?
Your last two words are perfectly apropos and especially of relating
value to us all. Self motivation is a MUST if we are ever going
to get anywhere, no?
Great post hun!
*hugs*
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Re: TRYING TO BREATHE
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by Lone_er on
Sunday, 4th November 2007 @ 12:37:17 AM AEST
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| I love the power of your poetry maam..The nuggets of wisdom embedded...Russ |
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Re: TRYING TO BREATHE
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by enigma on
Saturday, 19th January 2008 @ 02:58:15 AM AEST
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brew,
Next time I have to order license plates I'd like to see if anybody has taken, BREATHE. If not, I will. I also like Dory in the movie Finding Nemo. She's always saying, just keep swimming, just keep swimming, just keep swimming...then when she and Nemo's father are in the whale, she says it's time to let go. Nemo's dad refuses to let go because he thinks what will happen is they will fall down into the whale's stomach. He asks Dory how she knows something terrible won't happen. Dory says she doesn't know something terrible won't happen, but sometimes you just have to trust life, and let go. I Love Dory to pieces, but I'm an awful lot like Nemo's dad!
ron...enigma |
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Re: TRYING TO BREATHE
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by wheels on
Tuesday, 1st July 2008 @ 01:31:57 PM AEST
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So far this is the best -in th emoment piece of yours taht I have read. It is well written and exicuted. You just keep breathing and I will do the same.
--kevin
the lonely vagabond
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Re: TRYING TO BREATHE
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by wheels on
Friday, 25th July 2008 @ 09:46:48 AM AEST
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You know the more I read of your work the more I like it. It is direct and straight forward, but it is perfectly in tune with the topics you choose. Your direct uniqueness tends to weave a train of thought that is so easy to relate to - like we are following in your footsteps. The division you use really works well with the thought process you would experience - how a mind would break from one thought to another with certain pauses in between.
Again very unique, and intriguing.
Kevin
the lonely vagabond
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