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Corrosive Love
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Saturday, 20th October 2007 @ 05:15:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Why?
Why, my love, why?
Why did you make me cry?
How many times did you look at me
and you simply
lied?
Unequivocally...
Unambiguously,
You lied.
This pain is horrendous.
I can't seem to make
it go away.
This deed you have done,
it is like a cancer..
eating my insides out
each and every day.
Sadly...
Soon only the shell,
shall remain.
Laura Howell Horner
8/07
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2007-10-20 05:15:44]
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Re: Corrosive Love
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by PhantomVampyress on
Saturday, 20th October 2007 @ 06:06:59 AM AEST
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wow this is so heartwrenchingly sad.. this hits home for us all at one time or another in our lives and you have captured that hurt feeling so well.. the expression in this is marvelous.. beautiful job here.
rock on,
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Re: Corrosive Love
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 20th October 2007 @ 12:44:27 PM AEST
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My dearest friend, I am so happy that you are much more than a shell.
In fact, your casings hold in a very enchanting and delightful soul!!
This was such a raw and brittle piece. I have conflicting thoughts about
why you chose to separate the last two words. It's quite interesting , in
fact. You can read it like it is, "soon only the shell shall remain" and take it
at face value to mean ... well .. precisely what it means, OR you could
just read the last two words ... shall remain
.... shall remain
.... shall remain !!!!!!
As if the word, "I" should stand in front of them. I SHALL REMAIN.
(and damn if you didn't do just that! Literally, Emotionally and Philosophically!!!
You rock, sis!!)
much love, hugs and peace,
~MG
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Re: Corrosive Love
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by emystar on
Sunday, 21st October 2007 @ 01:19:40 PM AEST
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Very sad, my friend but awesome writing.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Corrosive Love
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by Nabahood23 on
Tuesday, 23rd October 2007 @ 11:24:22 AM AEST
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Written by Reginald Levi Walker, on 22-10-2007 20:21
Very good job
Three applause for the thoughts, you express.
That story will be placed among the very best.
You really wrote that story quite vividly.
The paradoxical lover for all to see.
I really enjoyed the words I read.
Damn, I wish I penned them, instead.
Copyright 2007
Reginald Levi Walker
This is a review to the wonderful entertaining poem I just read.
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Re: Corrosive Love
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by brew on
Tuesday, 23rd October 2007 @ 11:42:52 AM AEST
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L, you always pen such heart felt writes. Be it, deep or, anything that deals with life, and it makes all wanna keep , reading. Your my friend, are a talented , writer.
Hugs
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Re: Corrosive Love
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 5th December 2007 @ 10:14:10 AM AEST
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You do explain your feeling quite well. I'm sorry that it has to be sad.
Take care, ok?
David |
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