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Too Easy, Too Quick
Contributed by
Jyssvw22
on
Tuesday, 9th October 2007 @ 09:40:39 AM in AEST
Topic:
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We are,
Feeling good,
Its what its all about
Doing what needs to be done without any doubts
Believing in the night when persistent shadows come out
to play,
they stay,
In true form, and true color, within varying amounts
We are,
Sleeping safe in soft beds
Neatly stacked books to be read
Chasing dreams from a pounding head
A full-head-of-steam plowing through the unsaid
clearly spoken
voices resonate
They shout in echoed screams as they trail off into the dead
We are,
Coming full circle, as it was
Autumn leaves fall into piles of annual mud
A pelvic bone gives its final thrust
The full moon marks a centennial dusk
leaping years
collecting tears
As memories reflect on the outer cerebral crust
We are,
Remaining alone and isolated
Calling it home, then hell, as feelings fluctuated
Fickle moods
(a heart unused)
Caught between right and wrong
The conscious is subjugated
assume no innocence
presume we are all accountable witnesses
to what took place
to what presides
where to turn
where to hide
who to run towards
as sun and earth collide
I am vindicated
I am alive
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Copyright ©
Jyssvw22
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2007-10-09 09:40:39]
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Re: Too Easy, Too Quick
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by thebrokenyouth on
Tuesday, 9th October 2007 @ 12:42:42 PM AEST
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i really like this
i like this a whole lot
i like how it kind of hides the pain behind the words
the invisibleness is so real
i really like it
keep writing.
your good.
~remy
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Re: Too Easy, Too Quick
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by Fionndruinne on
Wednesday, 10th October 2007 @ 05:35:00 PM AEST
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Very well done, this one!
The pacing of the piece is strong and steady, a great basis for the more intense closing with its more disjointed lines. I am impressed!
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