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Unrequited
Contributed by
CrystalWinters
on
Sunday, 7th October 2007 @ 06:31:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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To me you were always first but to you I was second,
Even so my love never lessened,
Her happiness is now my sorrow,
My heart you pierced with an arrow,
I felt you were sent to me from above,
You, I truly did love,
Like none other before,
But now I must forever close the door,
To all my hopes, wishes and dreams,
I am back at the beginning for she has all those things,
So farewell to all those lost years,
Farewell you sleepless nights and endless tears,
Farewell my love, we were never to be,
I loved you well, now I set myself free...
Copyright ©
CrystalWinters
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2007-10-07 06:31:16]
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Re: Unrequited
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 7th October 2007 @ 09:32:22 AM AEST
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Wow. This was enormously moving. Bled out of the heart of one feeling hurt, but strong
enough to admit weakness and leave it behind. Tremendous!
I loved this line,
"her happiness is now my sorrow"
Holy heck, like a dagger through the heart. You said it perfectly! The ending had
a grip to it. Like a pain that dissipates with laughter, if you know what I mean.
Excellent writing and very inspiring.
~Breezy
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Re: Unrequited
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th October 2007 @ 02:12:03 PM AEST
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What a magnificent write, such firmness in it's proclaimation, truly sad and yet such a
simple straight foward directness, and again, that last line, so touching and yet
such iorny in that statement. the quality
of your writting is the style itself, being
the way you present your case and what is conveyed by the reader . . . Most lovely.
Ben
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Re: Unrequited
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 16th October 2007 @ 05:21:25 AM AEST
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I good peice, sadness lingers in your words. Would that your heart could be free.
Take care,
David |
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