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Scripture
Contributed by
Lucy
on
Thursday, 20th September 2007 @ 02:56:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
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The lecher’s “hullos” trained by innocent Bible air,
Slightly suspicious and dressed in crisp, white Penance.
“The latest trend” preaches the Pastor, al dente,
I’ll clothe you with Hoodies, married to Wine & Punishment
Like a good wife should.
“I’m sorry, but I don’t believe in Jesus” They laugh.
“I’ll take you out for dinner, Ritz?” They spit.
Roasted, turned over Their fire it’s pure and clean and white,
So white it’s cool not hot, cool and calm yet searing bubbling
And I’m the dinner, deceived.
“You’re right, tonight I felt the warmth of God.” Cue gloats,
Fat hog smile and glistening pork crackling, their face it shines.
Sheen of joy or sweat of lies, glitter of gold. Stolen. Thief!
Community Sunday Service follows, the safety First Aid burns soft
Like fire. Both man-made.
Copyright ©
Lucy
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2007-09-20 02:56:44]
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Re: Scripture
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by RLWildPassions on
Thursday, 20th September 2007 @ 03:25:31 AM AEST
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The idea for your poem was nicely expressed; carries lots of detail that can ignite many feelings. Wonderful imagery and tone enhanced your written piece. I especially like the comparisons used; it widened the images you most likely wanted to convey in order to help out meanings for the several directions your written work has lead. It makes a nice connection between both writer and reader.
RL:D
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Re: Scripture
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by RLWildPassions on
Thursday, 20th September 2007 @ 08:11:14 PM AEST
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Lucy:
I gave you 5 stars; someone else came along and gave you less; my first ***** stars counts originally...
***** from RL:D
site owner lol. do away with the stars lol..
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