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the snow woman
Contributed by
holy
on
Sunday, 9th September 2007 @ 01:18:51 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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the snow woman
holding a knife under a single light in the empty house
i am pround of myself for wandering around the world
going there and here to barnstorm with a broken heart
asking for the sky where is the end of the earth
if do everything exactly as i please in this life
i would like to hold you tightly
repeated the three words i love you in your ears
in desperation
unavoidably
i had to give you my back to barnstorm
ah , violent thunderstorm
ah,crash of thunder and storm struck
dont peacock
no much chop
i can sworn
i will shake the knife till the air was thin
and the sky was paler
and every day the earth paled
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2007-09-09 01:18:51]
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Re: the snow woman
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by trueecho on
Sunday, 9th September 2007 @ 07:54:56 AM AEST
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i love the body of this write....use the knife to cut through delusion..thanks for this write
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Re: the snow woman
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th September 2007 @ 04:05:39 AM AEST
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Sad with morsels of regret.
Your command of english is improving. I like the ideas behind the words.
These lines...
"dont peacock
no much chop
i can sworn "
I am not sure I have a grasp of them or what you trying for. But I am very impressed with the rest!!!
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