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We Have Bombs, Truth and Beauty Bombs
Contributed by
Live2Die
on
Saturday, 8th September 2007 @ 02:42:35 PM in AEST
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fantasy,
grips me tightly
lost under the maroon clouds
and dancing raindrops
my reality
beats your reality’s
ass.
I don’t need tragedy
to attain unity.
my red bicycles fly,
we don’t need cars with wings.
I have bombs
built of synonyms
and metaphors
so take your atomic mushrooms
and eat away.
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Live2Die
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2007-09-08 14:42:35]
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Re: We Have Bombs, Truth and Beauty Bombs
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by Fionndruinne on
Sunday, 9th September 2007 @ 04:43:21 AM AEST
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Hmm, good metaphors here. It moves well across the page too. I'd say this is abstract poetry, myself. A well-expressed theme, but the imagery is different enough to evoke a somewhat abstract picture.
Keep it up.
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Re: We Have Bombs, Truth and Beauty Bombs
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 9th September 2007 @ 09:37:46 AM AEST
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Ooooh I liked this. It moved right along and the ending was just damn good. Right on. Thanks for sharing.
Peace,
Laura |
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Re: We Have Bombs, Truth and Beauty Bombs
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by high_on_duct_tape on
Saturday, 26th January 2008 @ 06:15:35 PM AEST
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You might benefit from expanding on your reality, before you go into the contrast that is the second stanza.
Basically, you might benefit from answering the question, "what is your reality?" |
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