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Stay
Contributed by
adreana
on
Friday, 7th September 2007 @ 08:01:02 AM in AEST
Topic:
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There are too many ways you can hurt me
Yet I've got you stuck on my mind
Though I'm a hesitant girl
Stay
And if I turn my head for a brief moment
If you lose sight of my eyes
Give me a moment
Stay
There's something about you... I can't say
The way you touched my arm made me glow
I know I turned from your kiss, but
Stay
I've told myself over and over again
You may not want me tomorrow
But if you want me now
Stay
I will try to forget the others
I'll replace their lies with your truth
I'll try to love you... if you stay.
Copyright ©
adreana
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2007-09-07 08:01:02]
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Re: Stay
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 7th September 2007 @ 03:38:42 PM AEST
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Very heartfelt and honest piece, with a nice rhythm. Put these feelings into similar words for the other, if you can; there's nothing that can replace honesty and openness in a relationship right out of the gate. Keep it up.
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Re: Stay
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by Loyalist on
Saturday, 8th September 2007 @ 11:24:58 AM AEST
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| I know this. I have seen, felt and tasted such. I know this, of what you write. |
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Re: Stay
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by zenith66 on
Saturday, 8th September 2007 @ 06:06:52 PM AEST
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very touching for me to hear this...
and well written again..
well done andrea!!
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Re: Stay
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 12th September 2007 @ 03:00:46 AM AEST
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Wow!
I am very impressed with this.
I like the rhythmn of it as well as the content. I am right there with you, feeling the hesitation, the uncertainty.
Very well done! |
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Re: Stay
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by Puppy_dog_eyes on
Saturday, 29th September 2007 @ 04:37:13 AM AEST
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I love the way you finish each verse with the word "stay", like you are nervously imploring him.
Hopefully he is staying !!
Steve |
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