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Abused
Contributed by
zenith66
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Thursday, 30th August 2007 @ 11:06:46 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Thinning bands of golden light…
Fall in fingers across the floor…
The pain that now accompanies night…
As you come in and close the door…
Copyright ©
zenith66
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2007-08-30 11:06:46]
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Re: Abused
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by Moonshine on
Thursday, 30th August 2007 @ 11:16:35 AM AEST
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| It's eerie. I like it. |
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Re: Abused
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by catz77 on
Thursday, 30th August 2007 @ 11:19:39 AM AEST
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sad but well written
good imagery
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Re: Abused
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 1st September 2008 @ 12:55:54 AM AEST
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Holy HELL!!!
I can't believe I missed this one. It takes a gift to create the depth of emotion
in this poem, with so few lines! There is so much potency in this, I physically
shuddered while reading it. Your description of the last glimpse of sun
spreading across the floor to the association of "pain" with night are just
STUNNING!!! But the last line .... DAMN! Now that is what seals the sickening
feeling in the pit of the stomach.
EXCEPTIONAL write, Z! I don't know how I missed it, but I'm glad I
returned this morning for another read through your work. :)
Top notch!
~ Breezy
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Re: Abused
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Saturday, 27th September 2008 @ 02:40:25 PM AEST
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What a thought provoking & potent write.
I had a chill travel up my spine. My your
words say so much. You took me somewhere
I had thought I had put behind me.
The pain that now accompanies night…
I can so much relate to this my dear poetess.
Another brilliant write.
huge hugs,
dreamer |
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Re: Abused
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by FireStarter on
Thursday, 11th February 2016 @ 03:11:55 PM AEST
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| I can feel the sadness in the poem |
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