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Summer Snowflake
Contributed by
Moonshine
on
Thursday, 30th August 2007 @ 11:05:25 AM in AEST
Topic:
InspirationalPoems
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The flurry in the rain,
So pure and self sustained.
The authenticism of your being in the haying season's heat,
So rare and unaccounted for,
A truly splendid treat.
Alienated,
Yes you are.
You're not like them at all.
Your presence so undesired now,
Even as you fall.
They dismantle you with taunting.
They seize upon your goal.
Ravenous beads of water,
They eat away your soul.
Boisterous drops beat relentlessly against the sultry ground.
Beauty to the ears,
This collaborated sound.
A beauty though it seemed,
It was deceiving all the same.
Incessantly drumming raindrops,
They will bring this world to shame.
Prematurely drifting from your wintry season retreat.
Sailing in all your valor to a world of cruel sadists,
Seemingly immune to the antagonistic heat.
They watch you with dormant eyes.
My own viligant and anticipating.
Ignoring vicious cries,
I won't you let be cast away.
My snowflake in the summer.
My star against the sun.
An acid in a base.
The true,
The only one.
Copyright ©
Moonshine
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2007-08-30 11:05:25]
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Re: Summer Snowflake
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by catz77 on
Thursday, 30th August 2007 @ 11:17:18 AM AEST
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wow this was really good
flowed nicely
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Re: Summer Snowflake
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by Dom on
Saturday, 1st September 2007 @ 08:05:52 PM AEST
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I really liked this, the descriptions are beautiful. Clever use of weather and nature related metaphors to create progression in the poem.
I love the message in this poem, an appreciation of uniqueness.
Great work,
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