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one begins with motion thoughts or dreams
Contributed by
endlesspath
on
Monday, 27th August 2007 @ 06:52:16 AM in AEST
Topic:
fantasy
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One begins with motion
Motion of lingering, and unreal thoughts
To close their eyes and dream
Dream the most extradinary dream, one could produce
Not just an ordinary weightless thought,
One that shatters the earth
One that no other has ever felt or dreamt
What would the thought be of?
Could it put smiles upon faces?
Could it place frowns or sadness?
Not this time:
This is a beautiful thought
No harm or hurt
All splendid hopes and silver dreams
Things not another could simply imagine
Soft whispers
Caressing touches
Eyes meeting, never looking away
Warms touches of the hand
Finally, the soft lips that meet
Never a feel like this
Never a dream like this
Now all is in motion
You: awake…
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endlesspath
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2007-08-27 06:52:16]
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Re: one begins with motion thoughts or dreams
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by zenmind on
Monday, 27th August 2007 @ 08:01:47 AM AEST
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Wow I really enjoyed this poem. First of all, I like your rhythm and flow...I felt that each line, followed the previous, in a way that felt very fluid and natural. Your thoughts are interesting...very unique, in fact, I think that after reading this poem I have a better sense of who you are...which is a compliment.
This poem feels dreamy; surreal---organic. I definitely get the sense of "motion" here.
Nice job, it makes me want to read more of your work. |
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Re: one begins with motion thoughts or dreams
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by wordsy on
Monday, 27th August 2007 @ 08:14:22 PM AEST
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A well worded weaving my friend.
as always,
wordsy. |
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Re: one begins with motion thoughts or dreams
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 3rd September 2007 @ 01:37:50 AM AEST
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Wonderful post endless ... pardon the expression, but it was
quite dreamy ... the ending was fashioned with a cruel
abruptness, just like a dream sometimes is. Well completed!
Your words and flow was like an angel's voice traveling on air.
Very soft and beautiful.
~Breezy |
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Re: one begins with motion thoughts or dreams
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by TeamJK on
Wednesday, 26th September 2007 @ 01:04:06 PM AEST
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Wow.. I was really transported by this. Amazing write.
JK2 |
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Re: one begins with motion thoughts or dreams
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by Spike on
Sunday, 23rd December 2007 @ 05:49:53 PM AEST
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yes - definitely ethereal in quality and I love the lingering gazes...
Spike |
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Re: one begins with motion thoughts or dreams
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by zenith66 on
Wednesday, 2nd January 2008 @ 05:13:46 AM AEST
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yes what a dreamlike vision of love, ive read it many times now and still love it, so many stand out lines, and a beautiful understanding of feelings(is that just wierd)
anyway great post, ill read more of yours now.. |
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Re: one begins with motion thoughts or dreams
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th December 2008 @ 06:06:00 PM AEST
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| This is an awesome write. So deep and profound! |
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