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TOOK ALL I HAD TO GIVE:BUT I AM BACK
Contributed by
endlesspath
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Saturday, 18th August 2007 @ 12:36:38 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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a sunless path that was ever took
not enough to see, nor even look
you were given thy heart with no strings to keep
for the simple beat was not enough to weep
you made your path and strung all along
for you did not fall tearless and want to prolong
so why do you keep begging
for nothing i want
take your greediness, and move along
i have moved on for over a year
for now i see life ,so much clear
i want to have a happy time
to smile and smile and smile again
Authors little note for anyone who gave and did not get it back
this is too one who took so much from me and never gave any back in return. do not settle for anyone ever , reguardless what is promised. i have been un happy for along time.now i can smile, for a made a nice friend. friends are what ones need to keep them going,....do not fail me now.
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Re: TOOK ALL I HAD TO GIVE:BUT I AM BACK
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by myheartsvoice on
Saturday, 18th August 2007 @ 02:29:53 PM AEST
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Such innosence there is in longing,
with such honesty coming from the
heart . So nice to know you made it
after all. A very lovely write conveying
hope amidst all the hopelessness.
Ben |
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Re: TOOK ALL I HAD TO GIVE:BUT I AM BACK
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by shelby on
Saturday, 18th August 2007 @ 02:47:21 PM AEST
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A sweet write. I enjoyed it, as well as the message at the end. This is so true so true..
Smile and be happy sweety!!
~Michelle~ |
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Re: TOOK ALL I HAD TO GIVE:BUT I AM BACK
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by thebrokenyouth on
Monday, 27th August 2007 @ 09:52:59 AM AEST
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It only took me one read to understand.
this is good.
i think many people can relate.
good note at the end.
very helpful.
helped me make a good decision hopefully for the best.
great write.
i like the metaphor at the beginning.
remy |
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