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Easily smashed like a piece of fine china
Contributed by
little_genna
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Thursday, 16th August 2007 @ 08:30:02 AM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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This cloud won’t budge,
Its as if it hold some dirty little grudge.
I should be so content,
Rather than feeling so spent.
My life is taking new direction,
Yet I’m so stuck with this contemplation.
My emotions so torn and shredded,
This is what I dreaded.
A chance of a lifetime,
That feels like such a climb.
I want to smile, yet cry,
Makes my happiness seem like a massive lie.
I feel like a small naïve child,
I feel as delicate as a piece of fine china.
I could be so easily smashed,
I feel so mentally trashed.
DP
Authors note: This poem is atrocious but i thank you for taking your time to read it
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little_genna
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2007-08-16 08:30:02]
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Re: Easily smashed like a piece of fine china
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by Asthenia on
Thursday, 16th August 2007 @ 09:09:12 AM AEST
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A poem is not about how well it's written, not to say it's not important all, but it's the message and feelings within the poem that are of greater importance...and you definitely conveyed your feelings well and found a release thru the poem...so to me, this poem is just fine :)
I hope you find your way though!
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Re: Easily smashed like a piece of fine china
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by Adreana on
Friday, 17th August 2007 @ 02:50:52 AM AEST
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Hehehe. Sometimes it's just good to let things out. And what better place than here? :) America ain't that bad. GOOD LUCK!! (where are you possibly going to be in the USA?)
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