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Flying blade of justice
Contributed by
Torn_Thomas
on
Monday, 13th August 2007 @ 10:26:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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There's a fiery crater in my soul
where you used to be
I loved you deep, you broke my heart
and then you smiled at me
all is well in your head
you let me down so slow
but my mind is in turmoil
despite my face's warm glow
I smile back, pretend its fine
pretend i want this too
and then we part forever
this ended all too soon
My flying blade of justice
i crafted her of late
When thrown with anger
She seeks out blame
and that soul she does berate
The time is now my anger pure
i launch my blade out through the door
A howling laugh escapes my chest
I'll soon be free of your lead vest
alas behold at my distress
as i feel the blade lodge atwix my breast
I sink to my knees
eyes filled with suprise
my hate for you has caused my own demise.
Copyright ©
Torn_Thomas
... [
2007-08-13 10:26:00]
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Re: Flying blade of justice
(User Rating: 1 )
by GemmaLouiseRose on
Tuesday, 14th August 2007 @ 03:43:12 AM AEST
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wow... feels like i could of written this myself ...
i love ur use of words, perfect! xxxxx
post more! :] |
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Re: Flying blade of justice
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 14th August 2007 @ 03:47:11 AM AEST
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i love the surprise ending, the wonderful twist! purely beautiful. wonderful imagery, and expression of raw emotion.
overall - great write!
- Bethani - |
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