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Beautiful Brains

Contributed by Mangos on Monday, 30th July 2007 @ 05:55:55 AM in AEST
Topic: oops



Too much has the potential to go horribly wrong

The words are instrumental
when composing the perfect love song

Eroding from my heart
are the feelings that were once strong

Now are fleeting
now are long and gone



Compliments along side nice things said

Sediments clearing porous rocks from the beaten head

Cob webs

Prey hooked
and left for dead

Can I lay near you?

Can I stay close?

Will you share your bed?



Here in my arms
you are safe and secure

With my love
you feel warm

I in turn
am no longer concerned


_________
_____





Copyright © Mangos ... [ 2007-07-30 05:55:55]
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Re: Beautiful Brains (User Rating: 1 )
by Essentially9 on Monday, 30th July 2007 @ 02:43:12 PM AEST
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well first off, when i saw your title- the first thing that popped in my head was it must be a blonde's brain =]. *going with the stereotypes of america anyway.

i really liked your use of line breaks and the fact that your rhymes dont feel forced, but natural and that the fact they rhyme is almost just a clear cut bonus. your ending was the best of all though, it felt like an icicle to the heart, even though it can be taken differently im sure.


Re: Beautiful Brains (User Rating: 1 )
by Whisper on Tuesday, 31st July 2007 @ 06:36:52 PM AEST
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Good write. I had to read it twice to get the jest. Good choice of words .

Whisper


Re: Beautiful Brains (User Rating: 1 )
by hauntedscorp on Sunday, 5th August 2007 @ 01:42:41 PM AEST
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Ahhh... a coming of age write of sorts... :)


It feels soooo good when the obvious is finally made clear, doesn't it??


Limbo doesn't last forever, see? It just feels like it at times.



~Scorp.




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