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Stop, damn it
Contributed by
reprobate
on
Saturday, 28th July 2007 @ 07:18:27 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Sitting in a sobbing heap
Head hidden in hands
Sounds of sadness
seeping silently
May I help you
Plaintive plea
How we met
Fateful day
you cried
Pleasant chatter made
Found a new friend
Time nutured like
Grew a new face
You were for me
A happy blur
Told you so
you cried
Days flew into years
We have a family
Dancing on toes
Birthday cakes
Time sheened
Great days
you cried
Disliked work struggle
Maintained despite
Work anger beer
Too many rules
Stayed out late
Way too often
Call forgotten
you cried
Home early promotion raise today
Empty house welcome found
Too much pain discovered
Nothing but a ring lonely
Sure, didn't and forgot
Thought it understood
You're not only one
With feelings
I cried
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reprobate
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Re: Stop, damn it
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by CoalMinersWife on
Saturday, 28th July 2007 @ 02:09:01 PM AEST
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| very good. |
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Re: Stop, damn it
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by Keilantra on
Saturday, 28th July 2007 @ 03:31:25 PM AEST
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very interesting write. very original and despite the lack of sentences, excellent flow.
good stuff.
~kei |
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Re: Stop, damn it
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 29th July 2007 @ 02:32:39 AM AEST
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sooo sad....
love n' hugs nessa
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Re: Stop, damn it
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by blissful-ignorance on
Sunday, 29th July 2007 @ 08:48:28 AM AEST
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good poem, sad too, but i really like it
♥taylor |
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Re: Stop, damn it
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 12th August 2007 @ 07:13:56 AM AEST
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That was sad...really sad. Anyone who has loved someone for years, built things together and then lost it, can relate to this. It is damn painful. Great way you laid down your feelings.
Peace,
Laura |
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Re: Stop, damn it
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by emystar on
Saturday, 2nd February 2008 @ 03:07:51 PM AEST
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i'M SURE THIS PAINFULL WRITE IS A MASTERPEICE AS i CAN RELATE.
sorry didn't mean to scream at cha.
When you look back on these writes someday you'll understand.
Great work and hang tuff, my friend.
huggs,
emy |
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