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smoldering ash
Contributed by
Phantomvampyress
on
Tuesday, 17th July 2007 @ 03:55:42 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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The smell of the ash
intwines from the inside
is it a memory of the past?
or just what was chosen to be forgot?
The insicion goes beneath all that lies on the surface
of thoughts
reaching inside to grab what truths you hide
will it eat you ?
will you just let it seep through to
posion your soul with controlling the lustful ways?
reality becomes distant
feel the pain with those pent up memories
you chose to let sustain you from reaching completion
let everything go
as the smoke rises and filters through the air
as does the anguish you chose to hang onto
Vampyress Jenni
Copyright ©
Phantomvampyress
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2007-07-17 03:55:42]
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Re: smoldering ash
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 17th July 2007 @ 04:16:07 AM AEST
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Ooooo you did a great job with this.
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Re: smoldering ash
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by myheartsvoice on
Tuesday, 17th July 2007 @ 05:49:54 AM AEST
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Right off the bat this is my favorite of yours.
The tittle ia compelling, a bit restful, and quite inspiring, it's awesomely beautiful.
I see a different you, you in a different ight.
along with an inquisitveness and yet the
feel of one who is a most compassionate
human being . . . Simply put, i'm floored by this one . . .
Ben |
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Re: smoldering ash
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 17th July 2007 @ 06:44:29 AM AEST
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Jenni,
Very well done. I enjoy the depths of your writing...always intense and on the edge.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: smoldering ash
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 17th July 2007 @ 09:13:25 AM AEST
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wow .. what a great title, Jenni. And the thoughts that follow
are filled with a depth of emotion and examination that most
could attest to familiarizing themselves with.
this is almost hard to read, really ...
great job!
~Breezy
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Re: smoldering ash
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 17th July 2007 @ 10:51:28 AM AEST
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Very good work, friend.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: smoldering ash
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 17th July 2007 @ 02:24:20 PM AEST
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Hey ya Jenstar~
I must say the title draws in your reader and your depth & emotional content hit right at the readers heart.
It's great to be back and reading your fabulous work Jenni~ Keep it up girl...
*hugs you tight*
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Re: smoldering ash
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by Crow on
Wednesday, 18th July 2007 @ 06:33:10 AM AEST
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| Woo..this is very good work, I imagine a little bit in all of us. I enjoyed this. Vincent |
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Re: smoldering ash
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 18th July 2007 @ 06:54:54 AM AEST
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so clever how you worded this poem, so true the reality will seem distant when in this deep place, yet; you give one hope as we read on-to let everything go excellent write!
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: smoldering ash
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by Dom on
Thursday, 9th August 2007 @ 05:47:30 PM AEST
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Wow Jenni, stunning, vivid imagery here! You use the images to make the impact of the poem even more powerful.
Great write, and I love the title!
Dom |
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