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Involuntary
Contributed by
crow
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Friday, 13th July 2007 @ 11:28:19 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Breath as shallow
as sleeping Night birds
Love eased in..
and its truancy stills.
Involuntary moments
will turn on You,
salt remains
tears have long ended.
...and the hush.. in those brief seconds. Vincent
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2007-07-13 11:28:19]
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Re: Involuntary
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 13th July 2007 @ 12:06:58 PM AEST
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To your question in the author's note..... yeh..... yeh, I think I have. *sigh* Maybe it is for that reason that this piece feels familiar (in other words, relatable - but, somehow, it seems more than merely relatable).
The last line here intrigues me as it seem incomplete. Some part of me wanted to find a verb there --- the rest of me... well... embraced the fact that there wasn't one. There seems to me to be more to be said here, but perhaps the 'more' is something words just cannot convery. In it's own way... it is there, I think... and it is palpable.
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Re: Involuntary
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by needledancing on
Friday, 13th July 2007 @ 12:07:27 PM AEST
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Then to ask do you hear the silence of your soul as it kisses the air goodnight?
No Idea why I added that....it just poured from the chambers of my heart as I read this.
So tender and touching.A most tender write. |
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Re: Involuntary
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by shelby on
Friday, 13th July 2007 @ 02:03:16 PM AEST
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love eased in and its truancy stills yeaaa love this
huggers
Michelle |
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Re: Involuntary
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by Bruce on
Friday, 13th July 2007 @ 02:40:35 PM AEST
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| great write |
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Re: Involuntary
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by Vampirequeen on
Friday, 13th July 2007 @ 03:40:23 PM AEST
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Very nicely done.
impressive |
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Re: Involuntary
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 14th July 2007 @ 06:35:10 AM AEST
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Very emotional write...sorry to say, yeah, I have had those moments. Too many damn moments.
This line just got me....
"Love eased in..
and its truancy stills."
Made me think about this and that....and well...
I'm thinking of you.
Peace, love and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Involuntary
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by ladyfawn on
Monday, 16th July 2007 @ 04:25:42 AM AEST
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so soft, so gentle, so bittersweet..
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Involuntary
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 16th July 2007 @ 11:56:24 AM AEST
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Oh, good gracious!! haven't we ALL had those moments?
yeah .. and wow! Vincent, you captured, OH TOO DAMN WELL, that emotion.
There is a bittersweetness dripping from the words. A longing ... a hope ...
a tear ... a tenderness that grips the heart in raw emotion. Oh my,
how wonderfully, WONDERFULLY written, my friend.
An absolute gem of a write. And one that I'll come back to again ..
~Breezy
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Re: Involuntary
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by endlesspath on
Tuesday, 7th August 2007 @ 12:52:39 AM AEST
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longing yet not. seemily something made this explode in the mind. old rekindlying or thoughts of happiness that dwells still in the mind and heart. emotionally write.
endless |
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