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Diver
Contributed by
wizard
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Monday, 9th July 2007 @ 12:33:56 PM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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The open window beckons: "take a closer look!"
And so it readily lends a closer gaze.
Upon approach he peers above; not a cloud in
the sky...so he takes his weary gaze below as he
ponders the asphalt sea.
"Nice day for a swim" he thinks, as the waves
encourage him to take the plunge.
Soon it seems that the window is gone, and
there is nothing but an empty hole in a brick
wall...it reminds him of what his life has been like.
He climbs to the edge, checking the sky once again
for a cloud...or anything to act as a blanket of comfort
for his saddened soul...but the sky remains empty.
Now, below, the pebbled sea is raging like a hurricane
of hate; concrete blowing in the wind, twisted metal flying
by the wayside.
He hardly has a choice, and dives his final dive into this
harbor of doom, and, in mid dive, he notices that suddenly
the sea becomes tranquil, like the calm after the storm.
He manages to turn, and gaze upon the sky a final time to
bid it farewell. He now realizes that the sky was full of clouds,
and though he searched moments earlier, as he did his entire
brief life, he was unable to see them.
Midway into his descent he also realizes that the sky itself, even
devoid of clouds, could have offered the comfort for which he sought.
Too late to turn back he embraces the moment and lets himself go,
and takes his final swim in his sea of death.
Copyright ©
wizard
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2007-07-09 12:33:56]
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Re: Diver
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by sona on
Monday, 9th July 2007 @ 01:11:41 PM AEST
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A very emotional poem
really liked it
reminded me never to loose hope
For every cloud has a silver lining
Thanks 4 such an awesome piece of work
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Re: Diver
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by shelby on
Monday, 9th July 2007 @ 01:49:46 PM AEST
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Each word had me taking notice. This poem is beyong gripping and full of emotion. I felt the hurt and conflicts within it.
Nicely done
Michelle |
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Re: Diver
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 9th July 2007 @ 02:06:49 PM AEST
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I agree with MIchelle on this one wizard.
I miss reading yours and Billys poetry lots .
Don't be a stranger. :)
take care |
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Re: Diver
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 10th July 2007 @ 05:05:47 AM AEST
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Wow. Wow. My mouth kinda dropped on this write. Man, by the time I was to the end, my heart was practically racing. You have just captured these thoughts...these feelings so well. Excellent write.
Peace,
Laura (Wow....once again) |
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Re: Diver
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 18th July 2007 @ 11:49:59 AM AEST
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..a bit 'off the beaten path' from what I'm used to reading by you - though as salient as the rest, bro-
a wonder read~
B |
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