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Desultory Damage
Contributed by
reprobate
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Wednesday, 4th July 2007 @ 06:40:52 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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Hunting and chased by ideals and schemes
Ever haunted, those laughingly vague dreams
Children of jack, mere shadows, footsteps now dead
Wondering where the road miles finally have led
Hearts ripped out, searching for sutures
Listless immigrants to unknown futures
From an ocean of motherstars,
Just grains of cindersands
Wandering from each other,
Seedy hotels, dark bars, raucous bands
Check your hats, coats and souls at the door
Tomorrow will find us the too-familiar floor
Pockets emptied of the many best-laid plans
Vacant horizons revealed with hollow-eyed scans
How to go, what to do, when is it right
Swearing to godman -- not without a fight
Yet when dawn pukes its pernicious lumens
All that is lit are drained and disconnected humans
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2007-07-04 06:40:52]
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Re: Desultory Damage
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by StephaniePaige on
Wednesday, 4th July 2007 @ 09:26:32 AM AEST
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| I'm not really good at these comments, so I'll just say that I really enjoyed reading this. I loved the feeling put into it,the meaning behind it , and I loved the flow of it all. |
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Re: Desultory Damage
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by shelby on
Thursday, 5th July 2007 @ 12:56:19 PM AEST
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first line of second stanzy so potent woooo entire write is intense good flow and meter as well
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Re: Desultory Damage
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 26th August 2007 @ 04:19:28 PM AEST
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That last stanza was damn good...well the whole piece was great, but I loved these lines....
"Yet when dawn pukes its pernicious lumens
All that is lit are drained and disconnected humans"
The write was raw and sad. You penned this very well.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Desultory Damage
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by little_genna on
Tuesday, 22nd January 2008 @ 02:26:48 PM AEST
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the very last two lines made the whole poem for me. there have been far to many mornings i have woken to that feeling.. but i used to lucky enough to be able to snuggle back under the cover into my boyfriends arms... but not anymore i have to face the world alone.
your poetry seems to catch me unlike other peoples work. im not even sure what it is. just something. i cant seem to read enough of your stuff |
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