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inside your eyes
Contributed by
Phantomvampyress
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Tuesday, 3rd July 2007 @ 02:23:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Inside your eyes
another piece of me dies
take off the disguise
realize that all that really is
really isn't anything at all
we are just passing time
yesterday becomes today
the shadows of another become
your sweetest lover
hearts bound to a song that never been wrote
choking on the words
your stomach churns
your body burns
finally you recognize
you never were in love ..with me
Vampyress Jenni
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Phantomvampyress
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2007-07-03 02:23:07]
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Re: inside your eyes
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by deadheadpoet on
Tuesday, 3rd July 2007 @ 02:37:17 AM AEST
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Jenni,
It is heart wrenching to read....so filled with emotion. The last stanza, I could feel that stomach churn, it is an awful feeling. Excellent write my friend.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: inside your eyes
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by Poess on
Tuesday, 3rd July 2007 @ 05:27:05 AM AEST
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I like this. I love the last lines as well...
Great job |
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Re: inside your eyes
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by Bruce on
Tuesday, 3rd July 2007 @ 11:24:36 PM AEST
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| Just a perfect write.loved it |
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Re: inside your eyes
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by Vampirequeen on
Wednesday, 4th July 2007 @ 03:25:06 AM AEST
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wow Jenni powerful words
an amazing write
take care
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Re: inside your eyes
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 5th July 2007 @ 06:42:56 AM AEST
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oh so sad and bittersweet, a fabulous write!
hugs n' love nessa
roses |
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Re: inside your eyes
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by myheartsvoice on
Thursday, 5th July 2007 @ 07:02:35 AM AEST
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This is beautifuly realistic, jenn u stil pack a wallope with your point blank intensity. such true comand is obvious in your style along with devistating impact with your in your face approach. Simply put, a truly artistic write . . .
thank u 4 your loyal readership while i was unable to get on.
((((Jenni))))
Ben |
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Re: inside your eyes
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 6th July 2007 @ 12:48:26 AM AEST
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Ouch! That last stanza really stings Jenni!
This was brimming with emotion and so torturous to
the soul to read, for I feel most of us have seen both
sides of this coin. It's sad and desperate, either way.
Excellent post, my friend. Very well written!
~Breezy |
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Re: inside your eyes
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 11th April 2008 @ 11:37:56 AM AEST
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Wow..really packed with emotions.. loved this...
Jenni_K |
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Re: inside your eyes
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by xxILoveTheSilencexx on
Saturday, 28th June 2008 @ 12:37:06 PM AEST
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I know exactly what this means.....
you think it's real and fins out it's all a lie....and that sux....
nice job
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