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Outside
Contributed by
spike
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Saturday, 30th June 2007 @ 12:03:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Solitude is on me
moody thoughts and sad songs
weave overcast days,
and I’m wondering
will the sun ever shine.
the black dog of loneliness
nips at my heels,
and rejections coil in the post
It’s easy to laugh with friends
When you are one,
And the pain is only bad
Once you’re alone
It’s easy to show it all
When there’s nothing to hide,
And the rain is not so bad
Once you’re inside.
It’s hard to fall in love after
a certain time
the heart gets so rusty
it hurts to kiss.
I’m walking streets with
nowhere to go
and I’m wondering,
is this how it ends?
It’s easy to carry the world
When you’re adored,
And the strain is only bad
Once you’re ignored
It’s easy to throw it away
When time is yours,
And dream it can be found
On other shores.
Copyright ©
spike
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2007-06-30 12:03:51]
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Re: Outside
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by shelby on
Saturday, 30th June 2007 @ 12:43:43 PM AEST
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my heart beats in tune with the sadness.
the picture fitting with each heart wrenching word.
Poem is beautiful and poetic though my friend my heart aches for your pain.
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Re: Outside
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by emystar on
Saturday, 30th June 2007 @ 12:56:14 PM AEST
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Sad but written really well.
Hang tuff, my friend.
big huggs,
emy |
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Re: Outside
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 2nd July 2007 @ 01:06:36 AM AEST
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*Hugs you from afar* This is beautiful, but so lonely. God it brings about so many thoughts and emotions for me. Makes me think of where I am in my own life. Sometimes you can have a partner and still fill so alone. I loved the picture you chose to accompany the piece. Wonderful writing as always.
Peace and hugs,
Laura |
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Re: Outside
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 3rd July 2007 @ 05:49:51 AM AEST
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this is so powerful and sad.. its like an emotional sadness unfolding.. the flow is lovely.. just a marvellous poem here.. great job
vampyress Jenni |
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Re: Outside
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 6th July 2007 @ 12:29:10 PM AEST
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Your opening line is worded perfectly (it does decend upon one sometimes, doesn't it?). And there are other lines here that strike home... for their familiarity, I suspect.
There's more here than the words. Some will recognize that. The lucky ones... won't.
Well done, ito.
~Snem |
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Re: Outside
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 6th July 2007 @ 02:33:15 PM AEST
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me, being rusty myself and also cloaked in loneliness, i adore this poem! it is beautifully sad and an amazing write:)
hugs n' love nessa
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Re: Outside
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th July 2007 @ 05:02:00 PM AEST
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Such powerful writing.Slips into the reader like
a slow thrust from a cold cutlass.
Melancholy expertly written.
Life's a series of crests and troughs,so
they say.So here's a glass to the warm sunshine of the nexr crest,Friend.
Den |
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