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Emotional Entropy
Contributed by
PoeticHybrid
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Wednesday, 27th June 2007 @ 04:31:44 PM in AEST
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Emotional entropy
Happening within me
Silver lining disappears
Rolling clouds made of fears
Light within fading fast
As I deal with my dark past
So long without someone's touch
The pain that brings, too much
I long for a hand, a hug, a kiss
All those things the single people miss
Before long I will admit defeat and go numb
Then be sick, by the nightmare I've become....
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Re: Emotional Entropy
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by Thespia on
Wednesday, 27th June 2007 @ 07:16:45 AM AEST
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Deeply touching, you may feel that its not finished but does it really need to be, espically if your feelings and thoughts are also fragmented, the entire poem reflects that.
Either way, its quite beautiful, thank you for sharing it with us. |
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Re: Emotional Entropy
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by XxNights_ChildxX on
Thursday, 28th June 2007 @ 12:27:01 PM AEST
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its short and sweet leave it at that, greeeaaat write i loved it!!!
Jenni xxoo |
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Re: Emotional Entropy
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by shelby on
Thursday, 28th June 2007 @ 01:38:46 PM AEST
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So sorry for your pain......
The title is so fitting for this write.
The two second lines of the first stanza so grabbing, making the reader feel your hurt.....
Our pasts dark as they may have been taught us lessons along our way..... strength comes from those hurts even though there is time we dont know it.
Im sending you a huge hug and hope it reaches you and the pain and lonesome nights subside and in your life comes love with sun and rainbows
Michelle |
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Re: Emotional Entropy
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by unknown_utopia on
Monday, 2nd July 2007 @ 07:54:33 AM AEST
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| I feel ya on this write. |
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