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LOST..Even to thyself
Contributed by
brew
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Tuesday, 26th June 2007 @ 10:40:53 AM in AEST
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As the heart seeks
As the eyes try
Soon all turns to blood
Nothing is co-herant
Not a sound to be seen, nor heard...
Voices try to make sense
Yet can not
Irrevalance:
Must one always subdue to all
Must one cry
NO!
I can not make thyself do so
I can not lay thy heart to cling
What can I do?
I stumble through darkeness
I can not find
Can someone help?
Submiss to thyself...
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Re: LOST..Even to thyself
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by visionarybee on
Tuesday, 26th June 2007 @ 11:19:22 AM AEST
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not sure I understand this poetry
are you saying you're trying to feel and can't?
are you saying you're trying to understand but
can't?
sometimes we can't make ourselves do
like do things
like feel things
it's just not possible or
it's just to difficult
perhaps we want to love more but
we can't
are you conveying in your poem
stumbling through the darkness
of depression?
and that's it's hard to find
an answer
or answers
right now I'm searching for the answer
of what a true Christian is
and I find it like you express in your
poetry - I find it very complex
and to complex
and I feel hopeless
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Re: LOST..Even to thyself
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by PhantomVampyress on
Tuesday, 26th June 2007 @ 11:19:34 AM AEST
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i like the approach you took on this.. its very deep and expressive.. i loved the flow.. interesting and expressive great job
Vampyress Jenni |
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Re: LOST..Even to thyself
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 26th June 2007 @ 11:57:27 AM AEST
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aw, sweetie ... this just made me want to hug you so tight.
I hope all is well in your world, yet in this write I sense
a hopelessness and a confusion of sorts.
It's heartbreaking, sweet Dayna. Things are seldom what
we think ... good and bad, hun. Don't turn hope away,
as just when you think you are lost, someone finds
you!! :)
(Be kind to yourself)
*hugs*
~Breezy |
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Re: LOST..Even to thyself
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 26th June 2007 @ 01:17:12 PM AEST
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awww i hope your doing ok?
were here for you
hugs |
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Re: LOST..Even to thyself
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by Bruce on
Tuesday, 26th June 2007 @ 05:33:29 PM AEST
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| So sorry for the way you are feeling, wish I could help but keep writing and try to erase it from your mind. |
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Re: LOST..Even to thyself
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by Dom on
Tuesday, 26th June 2007 @ 10:58:15 PM AEST
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Sorry you are experiencing so much hurt and darkness. There is a terrible unease and loneliness expressed in this poem, I hope the cloud passes over soon.
Hugs,
Dom |
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Re: LOST..Even to thyself
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by needledancing on
Wednesday, 27th June 2007 @ 08:36:06 AM AEST
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| We all send you the same desire and that is to comfort you through this. You have shared the depth of feeling and that is great.As Breezy said someone is out there waiting to love you . Give time a chance to brighten your days ahead.Hugs. |
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Re: LOST..Even to thyself
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by fielding88 on
Saturday, 23rd February 2008 @ 02:20:57 PM AEST
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| This is something to which I think most people can relate. I love how this is written with such heavy emphasis on questions, it gives the poem that 'searching' feel that I think makes it interesting. Nice write Dayna. |
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