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On my own
Contributed by
necromant
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Sunday, 24th June 2007 @ 11:28:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Was my heart plucked out during the night?
Were my eyes blinded, deprived of the light?
Who stole all the heat, why am I so cold?
Who is this thief, who dared be so bold?
But I am the fool, who laid my soul bare,
A naive fire that gave up its heated flare,
Once a sparkling diamond, now a mere stone,
I lie lifeless and numb, once again, on my own.
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necromant
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2007-06-24 11:28:14]
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Re: On my own
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by shelby on
Sunday, 24th June 2007 @ 11:52:18 AM AEST
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a poem touched with great sadness yet beautifully written
Michelle |
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Re: On my own
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by deadheadpoet on
Sunday, 24th June 2007 @ 12:47:18 PM AEST
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OMG Excellent writing of the feelings of losing in love. I can relate to this so well right now...(having a tad bit of a tough time myself these days)...damn life is a struggle. Your second stanza made me want to grab and hold you...you're no fool, my friend, just human.
Much peace,
Laura |
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Re: On my own
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by JT on
Sunday, 24th June 2007 @ 03:20:45 PM AEST
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solid write. have strolled down that path before
-JT- |
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Re: On my own
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by needledancing on
Sunday, 24th June 2007 @ 03:42:42 PM AEST
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| This is an excellent piece. It surely sums up that flow of having love one minute and seeing it disappear the next. I love however the second part of the piece which reflects perfectly how foolish, bare, naive, lifeless and numb we are left feeling. Well done |
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Re: On my own
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by madhusudan on
Sunday, 24th June 2007 @ 03:57:27 PM AEST
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sad...this is what happens..we start depending on the people we love and trust the most and one day, when they let go...we feel vulnerable lost and hurt...and yet we still make the same mistakes...
nice poetry sad outcome... |
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Re: On my own
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 27th June 2007 @ 12:34:26 AM AEST
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wow ... exceptional poetry!!
My friend, this was heart stirring, for SO many reasons, most of
which was the ending ... damn sad. It is easy to say, "don't feel
this way" ... or "don't ever let ANYONE dare take your emotions",
but the truth is, I've been there. And I know how patronizing,
those words from well meaning friends can be. (Though always
their hearts were in the right place).
Truth be told, we always own our emotions, regardless of what
triggered them, and you have claimed yours as emphatically
and with as much skill as any one person could! A mastered
pieced of work, my friend.
Shine, you sparkling diamond ... your glow is still there!!
~Breezy
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