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ATTENTION! NO TENSION
Contributed by
ammalu
on
Thursday, 21st June 2007 @ 07:48:43 PM in AEST
Topic:
FathersDayPoems
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FIRST LOOK WITH HIS SOFTY SMILES
FIRST TOUCH IN HIS SAFELY HANDS
FIRST PERSON TO BUILD UP CONFIDENCE
FIRST ONE TO MOULD BETTER LIFE
FRANK IN WORDS AND FIRM IN DEEDS
FAMOUS AS BOLD AND FRESH ALWAYS
FOR AN AGREEMENT WITH SPECIAL EFFORTS
FATHER BOTHER FOR ALL
FILLED WITH ANXIOUS AND EXTEMPORE
FALLEN PREY OF TENSIONS
FRUSTRATED AND FRIGHTENED TOO
FOR HIS LONELYNESS AND SUDDEN ILLNESS
FROZEN THOUGHTS AND DREADFUL IDEAS
FORWARD ATTENTION TO DECLARE "NO TENSION"
FOR HIS HEALTHIENESS AND PEACEFULNESS
FATHER TO BE BOTHERED AND HONOURED
FOR HIS SOUND HEALTH AND SACRED DEVOTION
FACILITATE IN NEED
FELICITATE ON THIS DAY FOR YEARS AHEAD.
Copyright ©
ammalu
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2007-06-21 19:48:43]
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Re: ATTENTION! NO TENSION
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by shelby on
Friday, 22nd June 2007 @ 04:39:16 AM AEST
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I thought the poem and message within the verse is incredible.
I do however have a hard time with the all caps it seems to bold like you are shouting. Maybe though that is how you intended it to come across not sure.
Over all it is strong and a beautiful dedication to fathers everywhere
Michelle |
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Re: ATTENTION! NO TENSION
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by venkat on
Monday, 19th November 2007 @ 05:08:28 PM AEST
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| Yes I agree with my friend Michellle's observation..The poem is very good.. but for the capital letters...venkat |
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